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Here is the first draft for Woodcraft. I tried to capture his childish personality and show he's not exactly the brightest bulb in the box. :D I hope it's alright that I gave him a nickname but I can change that if you like.
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Awesome. That will be 1.5 mil on Lot .
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I do have slots open but I can't edit the title of the board at the moment. I guess there's some kind of issue with editing forum titles. If you want to post the form I can slot you. :)
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Oh yay, glad I checked :D!
Pet Name: Shorthand
Setting: I'd like it to be a story about thispet's grandson annoying him by constantly sending him messages over technology instead of letters, despite his grandfather teaching him calligraphy and stuff :) His TC is gonna have things like laptops, phones, tablets etcetc.
Personality: I'd like him to be a pretty frustrating person.
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Physical traits: Since the pets are different species and I'd like to keep it that way, if you could try to refer to him just as 'pet' or something similar.
Likes/Dislikes: Too much time on their phone :P
Preferred Length: 500-1k please :)
Anything else?: Really flexible so feel free to write pretty much whatever!
Here is the first draft for Seiji. and Here is the first draft for Ryouji. Let me know if you would like any changes or additions. I can change any of the names since they are intended as placeholders. :)
Here is the first draft for Fredrika. I tried to do a combination of Fredrika's status as a dream guardian and her interactions with the boy who gave her the name children can pronounce. Let me know what you think. :)
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Aaah I love how you portrayed Ryouji's personality 8D There's just 3 things for me:
- Could you change how Ryouji's subjects address him? So instead of "sir" can you replace it with "my lord"? :3
- There's a typo here -“I have nothing but respect for your father and you were an admirable student but I will tolerate no more of your father’s dispresepect." and also did you mean to say "brother" instead of "father"?
- The section where the advisors are telling Ryouji not to leave, could you add in a little note explaining what happened with Seiji? It was a little unclear as to why Ryouji was leaving/why Seiji might be harmed or something if that makes sense?
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An updated draft for Ryouji. I think I got all the requested changes. I didn't like using "sir" but I felt like "sire" was too formal since Ryouji isn't technically king yet. My lord makes much more sense. :D I did leave Chiasa using "sir" since I figured she would know him better than the average subject and be just a little less formal but not completely informal. You make a good point about the advisors. I decided to go with Ryouji's fears for his brother since the risk to experienced guards wouldn't be that high (or so Chiasa thought). He is always so concerned for Seiji that he will overreact to any threat of danger even if his fears are irrational.
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Chiasa using sir is fine ^__^nEverything looks perfect now 8DnAnd the names you chose were very clever as well lol
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OMFG this story is great! I loved the part when the fire dragon says “Hey Fyorn, you think it’s true they crap ice cubes when they’re scared?†and as for changes instead of Seiji calling his brother Ry, I think Ryou would be better ^_^ other than that I love the story!
I really love this story so far. The slight shift of perspective in the italicized sections works really nicely. I hadn't thought much about her parents, but I like the Idea pf her having a mother. Perhaps the elder guardians don't die, but fade into dreams when it's time for the younger guardians to take over their assignments. Not sure how she'd fit into a closet. Perhaps something like the walls of the closet being no more substantial to her than she is to an adult...? I absolutely adore the ending paragraph just the way it is. A real heart tugger :) ❤
I went ahead and changed the nickname. When you have the code ready for Dogged's profile just let me know and we can do the exchange. (I will send the story for at the same time).
An updated draft for Fredrika. I tried to make it clearer what happens to adult guardians and I was thinking since she's a spirit she could change her substance at will so I added a bit about that so the closet hiding makes more sense. :D
Here is the first draft for Shorthand. I had some fun with chatspeak since that seemed so appropriate for his character. :) Let me know what you think.
I'll be glad to add you to the list. :) I do have slots open, contrary to what my title says so as soon as I get your form, you will be slotted.
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Sure thing! I'll send you the code when I get home tonight c: Also I forgot to mention one small change where it said seiji's hair is blue, it's actually more of a minty color xD
Beautiful! I love It!
Awesome. :) That will be 1.5 mil on Lot .
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Amazing :'333
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Pet Name: Anastasya Fable (Known as Anne to her friends)
Setting: The same setting from Cygne and Kath's story ^-^
Personality: Basically Anastasya is a strong woman. She is over confident and proud in her career most of the time, and often extremely strict with herself or others.
PoV: Third
Physical traits: Classy and swan-like, with healthy written all over her. Long straight mahogany locks, but curled at the bottom and they are always well brushed or styled into tidy up-dos. She also have mahogany/brown eyes. Loves to dress in quaint and demure clothing
Likes/Dislikes: Likes: bunnies, she actually keeps on in her house. Dancing, balls and galas, fancy parties, cruises Dislikes: People mentioning her history, orchestra pits, mistakes of all kind
Other characters to include: Lia's grandmother, the founder of the Karanova Academy Lia's mom, (ummm let's call her Vasilisa? ) which is Anne's tea party friend/ex coworker And the children: Cygne, Kath, Lia
Preferred Length: Complex
Anything else?: Some background story and all o3o
Anastasya graduated at the Karanova Academy of Ballet. When Anne was younger, she worked at the Fontaine Theatre. She was diligent and eventually became the principal ballerina of the theatre. She was very creative, not afraid to try different styles and she was well loved. She had choreographed her own dance called "The Rebirth of a Phoenix", and it became her signature dance soon afterwards. It featured herself in a black wispy dress, in a dark background, and mixed with lightings it ends with a fiery scene.
Basically she was a legend, which caused her to be so proud. But in one rehearsal, she slipped and somehow fell into the orchestra pit causing her career to end. She became emo and depressed for a long period, because it was very humiliating to be on the headlines of every newspaper and it kind of became a joke spread amongst her co workers. Back in the days, parents would say to their kids "Why couldn't you be more like Anastasya" And then it turned into "Don't be too full of yourselves, or you'll end up like Anastasya" She was sad when her friend Vasilisa got promoted from first soloist to principal, and took her old place. But soon, Anne found happiness again in fancy galas and garden tea parties. She found that she's still graceful and elegant when she waltz across the grand ballrooms. And then later on, she was appointed the ballet director of Fontaine Theatre, where she went back being her old self, over-confident and tolerates no mistakes.
If you need any other info, let me know :D
I absolutely love it, thank you for the fast work! There may be a few edits I make later if that;s alright? I haven't fully decided if I want the character to have an actual name now he's going to be linked to Stationary so it would just be tinnnny things like that, if that's cool?
If you give me a trade number I can pay for it now :D