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I was wondering if I could be put on your wait list for a story?
I have you added. :) If you want to post the form now, I can get you slotted as soon as a slot opens up. (Should be in the next day or two.)
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Thank you :)
I will smail you my form if you don't mind, cause it's kinda long lol
The first draft for Betheny. Please let me know any changes you would like.
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The first draft for Seiren. I hope I didn't make her character seem too nasty, but I wanted to really emphasize how deep her resentment for her brother runs. Please let me know any changes you would like.
I just wanted to let you know I got your form and I took a look at some of your pets. The format you have should be no problem to work with. I can't say for sure when I'll be able to start the draft, but I'm pretty sure I can have a draft for you by the middle of next week at the latest.
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No don't worry about it, you nailed her personality even though I didn't give you too much to go on! You really brought her to life. :D I messaged you back asking the word count but I did it myself and figured out it's the standard length. I think it's pretty perfect as it is, where do I pay?
I see nothing that needs to be changed. Looks like everything is fine. :)
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Great. :D I have Lot for you and this one was a standard story at 1.5 mil.
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Pet Name: Alice In Wonderland
Setting: Wonderland
Personality: Curious
PoV: Third just calling her Alice
Other characters to include: Cheshire cat and whoever else you wish to include
Preferred Length: Standard
(I cant stop getting stories.. I love your stories to much. Ive got to many pets in need.)
I'd love to be put on the wait list for a character sketch!
Pet Name: Nikko
Setting: I'm thinking a hike in Oregon, visiting the various waterfalls.
Personality: Shy, insanely smart, wistful, wants to go on adventures but is hesitant to try new things.
Optional:
PoV: Third person
Physical traits: He's a white kumos with blue markings on his back.
Likes/Dislikes: Dislikes going outside but is in love with idea of it. Likes his friend, Kitten who encourages him to try stuff.
Other characters to include: Kitten is a new friend he's made after not having any for a long time. She's just a small orange feli.
Preferred Length: I'd like the character sketch option, running low on funds but if I come up with more before you start working on it I'll edit or message you to let you know!
Anything else?: I feel like it's necessary to make sure you know that I don't currently own Nikko, my sister does and she'll be giving him to me once I get another slot. Some people get weird and start reporting people for small things like that so I thought I'd include it. :) Other than that, I hope you have fun!
The first draft for Nathaliya. I decided to make her father a doctor since that would allow her to work with him (if he was a soldier, unless he was of very high rank, it would be odd for his daughter to be with him anywhere near the battlefield.) Total word count is just under 6k, longest request I've had to date. :D If you could let me know which chapter each change you would like is in (just a simple label like Intro or C2) this would be very helpful to me since this is quite a long one. :)
Just wanted to give you an update on Ilaera. I have the layout for how I plan to do her story. Normally for a complex I send an outline to my requester but since you provided one with the formatting for your other pets, I'd like to jump into drafting. I hope to have the full draft for you no later than Tuesday.
I have 36 pets so I know the feeling. I should have a draft for you in the next few days.
I should be able to get you slotted in the next couple of days. Thanks for letting me know Nikko's status though I can say I'm not one of those odd report-happy types. Also, if you decide later that you want to expand the story, that is certainly something I can do. :)
Since the characters are Subetan, would you like the story set in Oregon or in a setting like Oregon? (I could use actual lake names but not state it is Oregon, if that sounds good.)
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Thank you for the update :) Looking forward to it!
Wow that is amazing, and almost perfect!!!!! But some changes though, I'll have them listed :)
changes c:
In general
Nat's not really that impressive/noticeable. I think the most recognition would be for the first chair in first violins ( which are original members of WPO) , and the to Nat and her stand partner (which are second violin, first chair) c:
Philharmonics are usually 100+ people, but they only got around 4050
Intro~ Instead of missing violin in the ending, Maria hears the people sitting beside her talking about how they were not to be found (therefore, empty chai)
C1
~Timeline: Was many years after Sorrow/Desti disappears. Lord Protector just couldn't hold the enemies off anymore.
I don't think the ruler of Winterwoods should be named queen, since there could be only one queen in the entire kingdom.
early twenties. Had to be fully grown when she got Tiny, since any younger would probably require a smaller violin.
~Tying her hair with a bod is a trademark of hers xD
Nat should be somewhere around 2627. Her youth orchestra times were about from 17Could you make it so that the composer wrote Thunderstrike just for the war? IT's like, a new release 8D
~ 5? Medium range : p
~Karanova was Maria's married name. Her family can be..........Snowbell?
C4 ~Maybe Nat sees this evil man's ring (with gemstones that are very un-Swan) and figures it out. ~{Wintervale Victory Orchestra} Orchestra to concert perhaps?
C5 ~Maria brought a dozen of black gowns (since concerts requires black formal clothing) Nathaliya could hardly tell the difference. ~The one she went with is like the one in her overlay (except it covers her feet and maybe a coat or something becuase otherwise she'd freeze into solid ice). Also those ribbons to tie her hair! ~Maybe Nat just left the pretty rosin on her side of the stand after applying it on her bow? I dunno how she could be wearing it o:
~C6 {I present to you Thunderstrike.} ^Can that be in it's full name? _________'s 9th Symphony, Thunderstrike {The first movement was a triumphant crescendo} ^cresdcendo to sonata? C: ~Also there's no intermission, they have to play it through all at once :P ~Nat's duet was with someone in the first violins section (she's in second violins), not her partner
~Also for the ending, perhaps one of the harpist ladies finds Nat, who asks her to fetch help? But then was too late.
Hmm, maybe a setting like Oregon is best so it doesn't start mixing up.
An updated draft for Nathaliya. Did I ever mention that the last formal music class I took was around 10 years ago? xD Also, I was confusing rosin with rosette in my head, which is where the bit about her wearing it came from. I do know the difference, it's just been a rather long week. I think I have all the changes and I tried to make the ending more what you were looking for though I was a little confused if you wanted the intro to overlap the end (come back to the modern-day concert) or end on Nathaliya's death like I have now. Let me know what you think. =)
The first draft for Ilaera. I tried to work in to some degree her insecurity due to youth but give her a little confidence since she is an elf and skilled with her bow. Let me know any changes you would like.
The first draft for Alice. I really went for the whimsical and illogical with this one. =D Let me know any changes you would like.
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I'm sorry if I'm a pain to work with, but thank you so much for being patient with me!!! You missed one change about the intermission, there would be no stop in the concert ^-^
Ooh I love the ending, if it wouldn't be too much trouble I think it'll be awesome to have it overlapped with some modernity.
I love the story, it really fits my character ❤️ But I do have to ask though if, it's not that much trouble, if you could a paragraph in which she just travels to the land, learning her own skills, etc. It now seems as if she's going in a straight line from A to B if you understand what I mean haha, while she really has years of traveling before ever getting there
@ Pureflower May I please be waitlisted for a character sketch or standard story? Unfortunately I haven't the slightest clue about writing and I'm not sure how far something like this runs in length, so I'd like to leave it up to you ;;
Also, would this be enough information?
Pet Name: Firaffe
PoV: First (or third, whichever sounds better to you!)
Setting: Just a short, touching story reflecting on his past and present.
Personality: Bubbly, naive, friendly, positive, easily excitable and all around adorable
Physical traits: Experiment
Anything else?: I had adopted him from the pound four months ago. Strangely, he had his strength and defense stats quite high. I've always kind of wondered how a real cutie like him ended up there, or what his past owner's (or owners', even..?) reason was (since they put enough time into zapping him, training him, reading books to him, among other things). I really want to know, and was hoping you could perhaps fill in those blanks..
Love the story! ^_^ I was seeing it happen as i read it
The ending seems a bit abrupt but the rest of it is great. (I knows its a standard story so it probably cant be helped)
An updated draft for Nathaliya. I could have sworn I removed that section about the intermission but this time I made sure to get rid of it. I added a bit of modern Maria's life to the end, including a short interaction with Vasilisa. If everything looks good, I have Lot for you. Since this was like a long complex with a long story, I'm thinking 12 mil or 300 csc (Final word count was around 6,500).
An updated draft for Ilaera. I see what you mean. I wasn't entirely sure what the time break was between the end of the back story and the start of the regular story. I added a paragraph to give more a feel of the passage of time. Let me know if there are any other changes you would like, otherwise I have Lot . I'm 18 words under a long complex so I don't want to overcharge you but if 6 mil or 125 csc sounds reasonable, I would be happy with that price.
An updated draft for Alice. I left some leeway on word count with this one because I wasn't sure where to take the ending and thought I'd get your feedback. I added a section to give it more a feel that she's wanting to go home, and hopefully make it feel less abrupt. If everything looks good I have Lot and this one will be 1.5 mil.
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