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That's the image. ^ I really just want some more critique before I start linearting, so it looks better. xD Be as harsh as you want, it won't hurt my feelings. xD I'm on a quest for improvement! Also. My first attempt at lips. u_u PLEASE red-line them if you critique the lips. So. GO. :D

i actually really like your style! it's fresh and delicate.

however, i noticed that her eyes are really far apart. eyes are three eyes apart from each other, as in imagine a third eye in between yours and you've got as much space as you need. so since her eyes are so tiny it looks a bit strange having them on opposite sides of her head like that. the nose is also quite far down her face, but i think that's just part of your style because idk it doesn't look so bad to me?

o: You're right about the eye thing, yes. xD I just need to move them a little, for when I copied and pasted an eye, there was about two centimeters of extra space.

And yes. Nose is part of my style. xD It should look better with shading, cause it usually does! {3 n__n Thank youu.

no, no, leave the eyes far apart! it looks so cute that way!

the only problem i see is that the lips are waay to low. they're on her chin. i'd move them up, a little. i dont think you should make i t proportionally correct, because you have a style going on and i love it, but just a little bit up would make them look more natural. (which also means you have to move the nose up a little bit too.

i'd offer redline but i'm strictly trad. i could ms paint it it show you where they ought to go?

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okay, i know it looks ridiculous, but do you kinda get the picture?

I really like your style! Its very cute, and I really like the eyes.

However, there were a few anatomical errors. I did a redline, hope you don't mind! redline

Here is what I did,a nd why:

the first thing I changed was the neck. It was way too skinny for the way her head was bent, and the way it was bent before made it look a little broken. The cheek bone/jaw line was out a bit too far, so I brought it in a little. I also outlined where the shape of the head would be, so you could see how far the hair was. It wasn't too bad, just a little far out. The eyes, as stated earlier, are too far apart, and it especially looked a bit alien when I redlined the side of the face, so I just moved both of them in a little. You say the nose and mouth are stylistic to you, so I didn't change that at all. Just bring the chin down a tiny bit to her her mouth some room. I also added little boob/arm lines near the bottom, since the shirt is a halter top, those lines would be there.

I really hope I helped! Its a very cute start.

ivyatoms - Oooh. It's up to you. n__n I do see what you're saying, however. And for now, I suppose I'll leave the eyes alone until someone else says they should be fixed? Thanks~ Oh. Second person. xD

bijou_qt - AHMI. Thank you. :D Your redline is VERY helpful for me. n__n And yes, I think it's a good idea to fix the eyes. o: -does so, as well as fixed anatomical problems- Thank you very much. n___n

;D glad it was helpful! I think this is the first redline I've done, I'm happy you could use it! I am really excited to see this once it's finished!! ;DD

Wow, so I'm totally late to the redline party. >_>;;

Anyway, I flipped it because flipping helps find errors sometimes. c:

[redliiine!]

I hope that helps~

ahhh, bij's redline is super good! i think the combo of the facial structure changes and moving the nose mouth a little will make it perfect- but stay true to your style! there are a couple of artists around here that TOTALLY redraw your stuff and don't help you at all... it's most important to stay true to your style and not change it for anyone else!

xDD Thanks so much ivy.

And plip. :D Thank you. Your redline caught a few things that haven't been mentioned, which is good. n_n

Thanks guys. o_o Just looking at it as I'm fixing it, you all have helped me. xD Which I cannot thank you enough forrrr~

can you post your edited piece here when you finish it? i wuld love to see it, i am slowly falling in love with your drawings!

I like it a lot, but I also notice the mouth is a little too low.

I also think you should add more focus to her face, take a little focus off her boobies. c:

Hope this helps.