April 20, 2019, 11:59 am by Celestial
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I didn't read the original story, but judging by what others have said, this ending is better~ Loved the pun. And agree that a custom overlay of the meats would be super awesome; the art is so well done and the pet deserves an awesome display! Congrats on the win.

April 14, 2019, 7:41 pm by teacup132
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Congrats on the win! Have you thought of a custom overlay for your pet? The pet page image does more justice than the blue balloon.

April 14, 2019, 12:39 pm by JOJO
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thank u for listening to criticism and changing the story. this ending is a lot better, and i love the little pun at the end (-:

April 14, 2019, 11:43 am by Destiny
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And I wanted to let everyone know that I have updated the story. And this way, I can do an origin story that is based in fantasy rather than based on a frightening part of history/present.

April 14, 2019, 10:47 am by Destiny
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Fwiw, and sure it is not much, I did not mean to make light of mental health. I admit at the time I wrote that, I had been watching Suckerpunch and I think that is why it came into the story. I really meant for it to focus on the unlikely friendship between Lard and his owner. Once I get to an actual computer where I can make changes, I will be removing those elements. Again, I did not intend on hurting anyone.

April 14, 2019, 10:38 am by meowth
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the overlay is cute but.... yeah i'm gonna have to agree that the whole "hur hur it's funny because he's CRAZY XD" thing isn't good at all. it's 2019 lol sorry

April 14, 2019, 10:15 am by far
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I'm all for writing freedom, but I wasn't expecting that ending. I'll say I'm uncomfortable. Nevertheless, congratulation. The overlay is very adorable.

April 14, 2019, 9:10 am by Brivet
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the idea and overlay are pretty great!! but, I dunno. that twist ending of 'see it's funny/scary cause he has psychosis' felt uncomfortable.

April 14, 2019, 8:32 am by Balloon
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Oh... oh dear. ^X^;

April 14, 2019, 7:50 am by Dramatic
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Congrats, I liked the story!

April 14, 2019, 5:39 am by Vinushka
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That was bizarre but lots of fun. I love dark things that are cute at the same time.

April 14, 2019, 2:35 am by Destin
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I was confused near the end..Am I the only one who didn't understand? Congrats though. ^^

April 14, 2019, 1:59 am by thoughtful
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Hah! I was happy at first just to see a nostalgic dillema (so cute), but the profile and overlay are just... one hell of a picnic.

April 14, 2019, 1:47 am by eye
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I'm with , especially toward the paragraph at end of the story. Uncomfortable read, I gotta say.

April 14, 2019, 1:45 am by demon
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super not a fan off this pet, sorry destiny.

April 14, 2019, 12:48 am by Chrysariel
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Congrats! love the art and its something to think about...

April 14, 2019, 12:25 am by bobbins
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I've never been so unsettled by a balloon.

April 14, 2019, 12:13 am by SongSparra
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I'm not sure if I should laugh or back slowly away but either way it's super cool and strangely interesting, congrats on the win!

You saw that episode of Myth Busters too ;)

April 14, 2019, 12:06 am by Jovi
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Congrats, the overlay is supes cute! XD

April 14, 2019, 12:04 am by Julie
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Cute profile and story. :) Congrats!!

April 14, 2019, 12:02 am by February30th
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Even lead ballons float.

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