Subeta - Pet Spotlight

Pet Spotlight - emi101_101

January 23, 2012 12:00 am

emi101_101 has won the Pet Spotlight!

December 31, 1969, 7:00 pm by

Congratulations on the win, sweetie! Wonderful story :D

December 31, 1969, 7:00 pm by

Thank you guys! Came as a shock for sure!

and for the comments:

She wasn't actually done yet, I still was saving up to have a profile done for her.
I made the pet 4 and a half years ago, I just wanted to name the thing! D: and 3. Sorry for grammer issues, I honestly don't major in English nor do I plan too :p

December 31, 1969, 7:00 pm by

wow, the negative comments here annoyed me a lot. :|

congrats so much on the win!!! the pet is gorgeous and so is the story. you definitely have a writing talent!! c:

December 31, 1969, 7:00 pm by

Gorgeous pet, congrats on the win! :) :)

December 31, 1969, 7:00 pm by

I dont like that its a premade, but thats just my personal opinion. The story is quite nice though

December 31, 1969, 7:00 pm by

Though the story is great, I feel as if it has a lot of mechanical issues. The English could use some work and a lot of sentences have problems with the tenses, specifically with 'have', 'has', and 'had'. Some of the sentences aren't even complete thoughts. 'The wind blowing in her hair.' It needs a 'was' if it's on its own. 'The wind WAS blowing in her hair.' There are a few typos here and there, but nothing too serious. Paralized should be paralyzed, for instance. Other than that, the story is pretty good on it's own and congratulations on the win!

December 31, 1969, 7:00 pm by

Definitely the story deserved to win, congratulations :)

December 31, 1969, 7:00 pm by

Good story, the only thing that bothers me is how Emi was dead for two years before she was given the reborn potion, other then that its a cute little story^^

Congrats! :)

December 31, 1969, 7:00 pm by