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For starters, I was by no means an English major. I am, however, good with basic grammar and very good with spelling. If you implement some of the changes that I am about to go over with you, it would be wise to get someone else to comb through it again if you want it to be perfect. There are several things to go over. I hope you take no offense to any suggestions. I wish you the absolute best moving forward with this pet. If you do implement any of these things, I truly do not need any credit. I'm just trying to help out so that you can make it to the spotlight.

The sentence in the first paragraph starting with "I loved to cuddle" is a massive run on sentence that needs to be condensed into multiple sentences. In the first paragraph the "he is sure a", is not grammatically correct. You'd want to omit the "sure a". There is no grammatical need for the three periods used after "personal space". Start "What can I say" off as a new sentence.

In the second paragraph, I feel like Now to explain is a little brash and maybe could be re-worded to something similar to "You may be wondering why I'm a..." to draw the viewer in by asking the obvious question early on. The three periods could go away here too. The first sentence would probably be best to split into two sentences. The blue taz "don't care" is a big grammar trigger red flag, and should be "doesn't care". I'd place a comma after "what other people think".

In the third paragraph, the sentence would probably flow better without the "first off". You also don't want to use awesome twice in the same sentence, I would find a different descriptive word to fill one of those "awesome" spots. In addition, this is not a paragraph, I would throw the first sentence onto the end of the second paragraph to add length to the previous statement. I would start the third paragraph off with the "Have you ever" and add all the fourth paragraph to that starting question.

As for the fourth paragraph, two sentences are not a paragraph. As I mentioned above, add that sucker to the end of the third paragraph. These "..." gotta go, After Boy was I wrong put a comma, I personally think you should omit "this thing called" there is a ton of wording in this long sentence and it's probably best to trim it. You've started a thought with ( but never closed the thought with another ")". You are also missing a comma or two somewhere here. I would try to reword this Boy was I into two sentences. The ... needs to go.

As for the fifth paragraph, one sentence is not a paragraph, chuck it onto the end of the previous paragraph. You need a comma after internet. After "falling stars" omit the "and" and start a new sentence starting with "They". I think the rest of this line is fun so no further suggestions on this paragraph.

As for the sixth paragraph, this paragraph starts off strong. Grammatically you want to use "an" oven. I don't have much else to add to this paragraph.

As for the seventh paragraph, two sentences does not a paragraph make. You should add all the next paragraph sentences to this one to give it girth. I think the "..." kinda works here lol. I would probably do spacing after and before the "..."

As for the eight paragraph, this is a run on sentence. You should probably put a period after "star". Start the next sentence with many and I would suggest omitting at least one "many". You need to change the spelling to "FASCINATING".

I don't have much to say about the last paragraph. As I mentioned above, tack this onto the sixth paragraph as one sentence is not a paragraph. I think you may be missing a comma here or maybe could re-word this sentence into two sentences.

Overall, a cute story. Speaking as a reader, I know I'd love to see a photo of your dog especially if this is a true story. It would definitely draw the viewer in. I also sent you a TC item that I think you'll really like :).

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