It's 9 pages long, pokemon-themed, I mostly want to know:

1. What parts did you feel lost?
2. Is there anything that's repeated/badly explained?
3. Any obvious/huge grammar issues.

hey im willing to look over it if you want ! ill prob be able to read thru it once im done with college tomorrow or Tuesday :- )

No problem, I'll put it up on a pet profile in just a moment and sMail it to you