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"The dewy freckles sprinkled over every leaf in the garden, weighing them down a bit." This isn't a complete sentence. Maybe change it to "weighed."

I love your descriptions!

"She couldn't complain though, she loved plucking fresh strawberries off the vine and tasting the sweet juice explode in her mouth." I think this should be "tasting the sweet juice as it exploded in her mouth."

"at the 3pm tea party later that day." If you want to include the time, I would recommend saying "At the tea party later three." Otherwise "At the tea party later that day" works fine.

"I haven't forgotten about you, Miss Tulip" she smiled," This should be ""I haven't forgotten about you, Miss Tulip." She smiled,"

Those were all the technical errors I could find. I've gotta say, though, you are a brilliant writer. The descriptions, the emotional flow of the piece, the whole thing was just lovely.