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Jul 21, 2017 8 years ago
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My pet Edrick really needs his story to be re-written. Please post samples and prices.

Story Edrick was 15 when he was drafted for the war in 1823, serving many years in the war. When he was 35, he fell in love with a woman named Annabelle. Every three days, he would sneak out of his posting and meet with her. Edrick never knew he was being watched sneaking off by his displeasing General. Running as far as he could from the blasts, Edrick would meet his love every three days in the old graveyard, and that's where they spent passionate times together. Edrick slowly counted the days, and on one of their many third day meetings; he left to meet her, only she wasn't there. He became frantic, his heart skipping beats. "Looking for something?" Edrick turned around to the voice of his General. His fangs were drawn, and his love was helplessly clutched in his grasp, her face distorted with fear. "Let her go!" Edrick pleaded. "I'll do anything for her!" The General looked at her "Anything?" He asked. "Would you die for her?". Annabelle cried out and her attempts at escaping were ruthless. "Yes" Edrick said. She screamed at them, falling to the ground as she was let go. The General appeared behind Edrick "You foolish mortal..". He sunk his fangs into his neck. Dropping his gun, Edrick moaned in pain as his life was drained away. The General whispered into his ear "Tonight is the night you will become a vampire. You will never get to see your family or friends ever again". Edrick's world went black as he fell to the ground, victimized to nightfall.

There used to be love and light in Edrick's life; now he just sits there wasting away, like an old clock that has stopped ticking that has been long forgotten about. People see him as being nothing more then a beast; who feasts on human blood for no reason, but to him, it brings back memories. Recollections of when he used to immerse his human teeth into Annabelle's soft skin, tasting her sweet blood. Edrick was never always this cold or futile. Since he was turned into a vampire, his purpose faded away along with all hopes of humanity. Throughout the centuries, he's questioned himself as to why his maker let him live. His master released him a 100 years ago, but Edrick still gets the odd visit from him, and he cannot stand the very sight of him. Edrick is different from other vampires - he has human emotions and feelings; unlike the rest, who are robotic and seamlessly cold. He finally gave up the memory of Annabelle, because blood shed tears cannot bring her back from the dead. He watched her grow and meet a new love and kept an eye on her family; then one by one, he watched his friends and family die from old age, and Edrick knew he was all alone. Contemplating, a chilling neigh broke the silence. Excited, Edrick knocked over his brass oil lamp and went to the door. Upon opening it, a jet black stallion with red glowing eyes stood before him. Placing his hand on his maw, he stroked his horse and kissed his maw. "I haven't seen you in 50 years. Where have you been?" The animal nickered and disappeared. Edrick's horse bonded by his blood, had become immortal when he fell.

Edrick's first night as a vampire was difficult. He met the harsh reality of what he really was; starving for human food. He learned to adapt to the taste of human blood, but he will give anything to eat human food once again. For an eternity, Edrick has been plotting the death of his maker, unsure of how he'll go about it. He hopes that one day, he'll meet another love of his life, but until then, he is seeking his revenge.


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Jul 21, 2017 8 years ago
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Hello! I currently have a PWYW stories thread (link in my signature), where I have plenty of examples (finished stories of my own, and commissioned pieces). Feel free to post in there if you like what you see!

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