I am hoping that you guys might be willing to let me know if this is descriptive enough to introduce his storyline but still engaging enough that people actually want to read it and more.

Any critique or feedback is welcome.

Also, what other kinds of things are commonly included when creating a Pet Profile? [li]Is it okay to have a section with a long story about one of his adventures through time? [li]I know I need to draw his design and include that somewhere in the page eventually. [li]Also, I could add a section describing his personality and likes and fears and all that? [li]What else?

It is very good. Easily read and flowing. I think the break is intentional on the last paragraph. Not sure clue is the right word. I can not find my thesaurus (moving house and it is in the wrong house). I am sure there is a better word.

I was on my way to my other laptop to start writing one of my pets story. I have it in my head. So thank you I am now inspired by your writing to start.
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Found Thesaurus I was thinking of words like omen or augury. Also between posts I wrote first draft of pet Cheevee's story.

it's a good story. the only thing i see that's missing is something for spotlight