New Plot Idea
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I've recently had a brilliant idea for a new plot on Subeta. I tried filing a ticket about it and got pointed over to the Suggestions & Ideas forum instead, so here I am~ Only bad thing about this is that everybody's going to know about it now and it won't be a surprise. For any of those who do not like potential plot spoilers, I do not recommend reading this.
I've always been a fan of Rumi, but I noticed that the great sticker vendor doesn't actually have a sticker of her own! We've got stickers for other NPCs, and I figured if anybody deserves a sticker for themselves it should be Rumi. That got me thinking of a neat plot Subeta could do that basically results in Rumi getting her own sticker c: Plus, I think she's bound for an art update anyways, and it would just be perfect timing to have a plot to boot. So, let's get started!
Day 1: News Announcement
News post:
-Cue new salesperson NPC-
Well hi there! I'm here to update you guys on a new product that's going to be hitting the shelves sometime tomorrow! From the great creators of the Endeavor and Cadogre, we're now expanding our business in a different way: juice! You heard right, Blackmoon Corp has recently been experimenting with new compounds and combining them with all kinds of good stuff. What we ended up making was this new fantastic juice that your pets will love! We're calling this new sensation Blackmoon Juice(IDK, think of a more creative name), and lucky you! We're giving away one free sample to the people of Subeta. Why don't you go ahead and try some today? It's free! What have you got to lose?
When you go get your free sample, you're greeted by the Blackmoon employee where he will let you constantly know how awesome Moon Juice is in great length.
Day 2: Shops and REs
Blackmoon Juice will hit the shelves of most of Subeta's food shops. Rumi's NPC will by now probably be changed, and you can ask Rumi what she thinks about Blackmoon Corp's new product. If you ask, she will give you an explanation that the juice unsettles her.
Rumi: I don't know, man. Why is Blackmoon pushing this juice on everybody? Something's not right, I think. That's why I'm saying no to his propaganda.
Throughout the day users will get random events saying "Don't forget to buy some yummy Blackmoon Juice for your pet!" If you've fed your pet some already, users will also get random events from their pets saying "I want more Blackmoon Juice! Will you buy some for me?" This will keep going on for the duration of the plot.
Day 3: Something fishy
Now, Blackmoon Juice is showing up in shops that don't even carry food products. If you go back to Rumi, she still doesn't sell it, and looks a little worried.
Rumi: So now [shop name here] is selling Blackmoon Juice? Man, is that even safe? I told you something wasn't right. Could you go ask [shopkeeper name here] why they've started selling this bull?
After engaging with the shopkeeper, you'll notice that they aren't too happy about Blackmoon Juice, but endorse it nonetheless. They refuse to let you know the details, however. After investigating the shop, you find a Blackmoon Corp note hidden in a pile of letters and approach the shopkeeper about it.
Shopkeeper: Okay, okay. Blackmoon Juice isn't exactly my line of business, but since Blackmoon Corp now owns some major suppliers of mine, I'm kinda bound to the new agreement they gave me. The only thing I can do is endorse it and hope that they don't cut off my supplies.
Going back to Rumi to tell her what's up, she's now even more suspicious about Blackmoon Juice.
Rumi: So they are basically forcing people to sell their "juice" like some kind of puppet? This needs to stop. Us shopkeepers should have our own say in what we sell, you know? Well, probably the quickest way to get it shut down is see if they're doing anything illegal. Could you get into Blackmoon Corp for me? What? You'll probably get in trouble? Screw the government, we need to take care of this ourselves. I'll get something started down here. I can't close my shop at a time like this! I'd be giving in to Blackmoon!
You think that the best way to get into Blackmoon Corp would be by a tour of some kind. You go back to the avid Blackmoon Corp employee and ask if you can go on a tour since you love the product so much.
Blackmoon Salesperson: What's that, you like the Blackmoon Juice? Awesome! And you want to go on a tour? Sounds great, but we're not doing tours right now, buddy. How about some Juice for your pets in the meantime?
After trying to convince him you can't live without a tour, he's not buying it.
Blackmoon Salesperson: Well, from our data it seems like you last bought some Blackmoon Juice _______ ago. From this it's hard to judge if you really are a fan. Now if you bought some Blackmoon Juice right NOW...
After buying some fresh Blackmoon Juice you go back and try again, but it's still not enough. You need to buy a few more to convince him of your obsession.
Blackmoon Salesperson: Whoa, you're serious, aren't you? Well, I'll go talk with my boss and see if we can put something together. A tour would be pretty good PR...
Day 4: Tour time
Blackmoon Salesperson: Well, it looks like we can do a small tour, but just for those Blackmoon Juice fanatics! Lucky you guys! You get to see where the good stuff is made! The actual ingredients are a secret, though, so there's absolutely no snooping around allowed! You hear? And of course, everybody who attends gets a FREE Blackmoon Juice because we care so much about you guys! If you're ready let's head on up to Atebus now!
You will now be able to access a little bit of Blackmoon Corp's building. Though, searching around yields limited results, except you now know there's a locked back room that you're sure contains something illegal behind it. Since you can't get away from the salesperson, you keep on the tour noting stuff down and check out the rest of Atebus.
The trapped minions in the wasteland now only want the Blackmoon Juice and refuse anything else. If you don't have what they want, they become agitated. You go back to Blackmoon Corp for a ride back and ask about the minions, but the salesperson doesn't know anything about it.
Blackmoon Salesperson: Well, I guess even minions love our Blackmoon Juice! Are you ready to go back and get your free bottle of goodness?
Before you leave you notice a powder on the floor that wasn't there before and also take note of it while heading back to Rumi. You tell her what's going on about the minions and the suspicious door and dust.
Rumi: Powder? Powder is no good! There shouldn't be any kind of powder in drinks! Unless it's like powder drink mix, but I'm sure it's some kind of illegal substance! Oh, and there's definitely something behind there they don't want us seeing. That's why it's locked, duh. If I didn't want people seeing something I'd keep it locked up too. Can you see if maybe Ian can figure out what the powder is made of? I think that's how we're going to take Blackmoon Corp down!
Rumi gives you a vial to fill with the powder, which you head back to Blackmoon Corp for and then go off to Ian's. Ian says he can give you the results in a few days, since juice isn't on the top of his to-do list, even after trying to convince him to do it now and get it over with.
Day 5: Sticky Business
Rumi's shop is now closed with a sign reading "Temporary relocation" on it. You follow the directions and find Rumi on the street in a portable booth. She has anti-moon juice banners hanging around her and when she sees you she calls you over.
Rumi: Hey! Good to see you again. I decided it's high time we took a more aggressive approach to stopping Blackmoon's gross juice. I've made some custom stickers and I'm spreading the word. Here, take a couple and spread the word. Oh, I also managed to snag this old beat up arcade machine from the Hustler and I thought to turn it into more anti-Blackmoon stuff - Whack-A-Blackmoon! I think I'm going to have a contest to help generate some buzz. Try and get a high score and I'll give you something rad.
Whack-A-Blackmoon is a minigame that's essentially like whack-a-mole. It's got Blackmoon featured on it as well as the salesperson. I figured a plot minigame or two would be a nice touch.
Day 6: Arena
After spending a day or two whacking the Blackmoon bopper, Rumi asks you if you've checked on the minions recently, which you haven't. When you go back to check on them, they've become really agitated and angry, constantly demanding more Blackmoon Juice. This is the part of the plot where the battling comes in. The bubble minions will be the first battle opponent in the battle coliseum OR the new minion battling feature. I don't know if/when this plot will be used, but if it's out of beta then the minion battling would be a feasible alternative.
After encountering these, you go back to Rumi to report what you've witnessed. Ian also arrives with the chemical analysis and tells you both the news.
Ian: So I've finally got around to doing your thinger-majigger. Where did you get this stuff? My compound detector turned up inconclusive, so what we're dealing with here is some new type of chemically engineered material. The closest thing my machine could match it with were metal alloys.
Rumi: We've gotta find out what's in that locked room! You go on ahead to Atebus, Ian and I are going to try and get the info out there of what's really in Blackmoon Juice.
This time you avoid seducing your favourite salesperson for a tour and just head straight to Blackmoon Corp in secret. If in the case that the minions will be done in the minion battles, the first opponent will be shifted to Blackmoon Corp patrol robots.
Day 7: Close call
Minigame time again. In order for you to access the door, you need the keys which are held in the manager's office. The key is to get the manager to get distracted long enough for you to get his keys and enter the forbidden room. Once you have the keys, you make your way down to the locked door and open it, being greeted by a higher tiered set of Blackmoon robots guarding the room.
Day 8: Lab rat
After the guards have been safely sedated, you head in to what looks like a sophisticated laboratory, where you see a whole bunch of data all over computers and scrawled on chalkboards. One thing has you particularly interested, and that's the "level of addiction" chart, that shows the addiction progress of Blackmoon Juice. Scribbling down everything you see, you try and go back to Ian and Rumi, but are stopped by the lab scientist who gives you a rundown that they've been giving test subjects small dosages of Blackmoon Juice daily to see the effects, and so far they have not been proven to be harmful to the subjects, but highly addictive. The level of addiction seen in the test subjects is still within "legal capacity" as the scientist says, and therefore there's nothing to stop it from hitting the shelves. He still tries to get you to leave your notes behind, and when you refuse, he gets the lab rats on you. And here we have our next battle challenger!
Day 9: What have I done
After being defeated, you tell the scientist that the juice isn't all that the data shows. When you take him to the wasteland, he sees for himself that the addicting juice turns minions quite vicious, and this could quite likely happen to Subetan pets as well. The scientist agrees to help you stop the selling of the juice, but before you can, our friendly salesperson has to interrupt. Insert our next battle challenger!
Day 10: Finale (For sure do not read if you don't want spoilers)
I should have probably stopped writing back when it was at day 1. I'm just going to wrap up the finale. Calvin Blackmoon himself will be the final impossible challenger with two modes, and then Sebastian Phoenix finishes him off and bans the sale and production of Blackmoon Juice. Pets and minions are being slowly rehabilitated as well. Sebastian Phoenix got the news when Rumi gathered the people of Centropolis together and started a movement to ban Blackmoon Juice after people learned that it contained a man-made, highly addictive substance and reports started surfacing of agitated pets injuring their owners. The scientist who concocted the mix isn't completely off the hook and has to serve some jail time for it, but he happily accepts. And for Rumi? Well, she turns down a job for working for Mr. Phoenix, but gets rewarded nonetheless. Reluctant to get anything else, she goes back to her shop, but she finally gets her sticker! Yay!
THE END.
Anyways, yeah, this is why I wanted to file a ticket in the first place so that I didn't have to blab about this site-wide :( Well, maybe there could still be some use out of this, right? Comments and feedback appreciated! Thanks, everyone!
Well it really is interesting and usually there's a lull during this time and the next event... plus we hadn't really had a plot at all since Morostide (and that was in October of last year) Kinda amusing that you'd pick Rumi of all people, it's cute none the less. Perhaps June can be a sticker month and this could be put into effect. Might not go exactly as you've explained it but still if such a plot were to be put into effect, I'd enjoy it. Thanks for sharing the idea let's hope it's considered!
Maybe I'm a jaded jerk or something, but I came here really dreading what "new plot ongz" was going to be suggested...and I really like this. This is an incredibly impressive outline with a really comprehensive story, that I think would be fun to do.
Minus battling. My pets aren't battlers. Their poor owner just doesn't get it and doesn't really wanna try to. But otherwise JAM it sounds like a cute, short-run thing!
got me like
I dig it.
I can't see them using it since it's out in the public like this, and there would probably be legal issues anyway. But I was kind of hooked by the end.
I think you totally nailed Rumi's character. :D
Eeeee, I'm so glad you guys like it! And also different strokes for different folks, right? :P That's why I put some battling and some games in there~
Thank you! :) I was like "what would Rumi say" the entire time I was writing her parts. Makes me smile knowing that people are up for this!
I only read the first couple of spoilers (because spoilers) but I really like this idea!
Be on the lookout. Be ready to help each other. It's important.
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I'm glad you like it too! :D And that's exactly why I put in the spoiler tags EVERYWHERE. I'm happy that they're doing their job and people aren't inclined to read the whole thing if they don't want to!
This is so thought out. I'd totally be into this.
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Wow too bad you're not a plot writer. I really like this!
There has recently been another thread created for a part of Atebus that has been sitting idle for a long time: Area 62. I was thinking that I might be able to add this to my plot, but adding further story to it might deter from the whole "get Rumi a sticker" initiative. That's why I think that this plot idea of mine could be a prelude to a bigger, badder Blackmoon plot later on :) That way, the story remains in tact and it will give Blackmoon a chance to shine in all of his infamy. Plus, the characters introduced here can make another appearance in Blackmoon's plot.
If you guys want to hear my take on a Blackmoon plot, let me know :) Might take me a bit to write it all out, though (I should probably not write out a detailed story like I did this one but I'll do it anyway.)
