I was wondering if anyone out there would like to take this plot and spice it up! Usually I'm good at this kind of thing, but nothing is coming to me on this plot. I want it to sound interesting and cool.

Ok, ok, here's the plot: The King has died, and new ruler steps into place, his wife. Many speculate that she killed him to get the throne. Little did anyone know, she was a queen of a different world as well. She has legions of demons at her command, ready to slay whoever stands against her. Some roam the land, killing for sport. This once great land, reduced to nothing. Crops don't grow, animals die, the trees are burned, people die of unknown sicknesses. There now has formed an underground alliance of people wanting to take down the queen. There is a rumor snaking about that queen spies has snuck in.

See what I mean? If you would like to take on this chalange that I lay before you, post here let me know. Then Smail it to me. I might even give a nice tip/pay to the one I pick.

Sounds pretty good to begin with, but if I have a few more details, I could probably help out. So here's a few questions:

Where and when does the story take place? A setting is very essential to a plot.

What kind of people is this "underground alliance" made up of? Ordinary peasants? The aristocracy? Or maybe the vassals/knights who are supposed to protect the queen in her military, but because they're generally treated like dirt by her, and their once beautiful countryside has been reduced to a wasteland, they decide to stand against her and take her down from the inside by earning her trust and then betraying her like she did to them. Just a little idea. Also, who is the leader of the alliance? Knowing who the alliance is made up of will make it easier to determine who the "mole" is. ^_^

Hopefully that helps, but if I have more details about the story, I can come up with endless ideas. ;D Maybe even if you answer some questions for yourself, ideas about your plot will come to you more easily. Things that are essential to a storyline are:

Setting (where and when) Conflict (I think you have this established already, but it's good to re-evaluate when you get stuck) Protagonist/Antagonist (antagonist is the queen obviously, but who's your protagonist?) Climax (have in mind what and when this is going to be while your story develops) Rising action (events that lead up to the climax) Falling action (events after the climax that lead to the conclusion) and lastly, your Conclusion. I know that when you first start a story, the ending is generally the last thing you want to think about. But I like to think of a story as getting from Point A to Point B, so my ending is one of the things I develop as I'm writing, and once I've decided what the ending will be like, it makes coming up with all the other events in between a lot easier.

I hope this proves to be helpful, and let me know if you need anything else.

Try starting like this: 'Everything is picture perfect in the land of __; that is, until the king's death.' It put some suspense in there!

Add something after to tell about the sucession like: 'As customary, a new ruler took his place-- his wife.' The dashes make things seem more important and shocking, while comas tone the information down. It's more attention grabbing with the dashes. Take the sentance and merge the two sentances together: 'As customary, a new ruler took his place-- his wife-- and with it came rumors that she killed him. '

That sounds good :) but maybe you can combine the sentance after it like this: 'Little did anyone know, she was a queen of a different world with demons ready to do her commands.'

Make it like this: 'The once-great land was reduced to nothing while demons roamed, killing for sport meanwhile crops stopped growing, forests burned down, people aand people died of unknown illnesses. '

'In the midst of the chaos emurged an underground alliance of people with one goal- to take down the queen. But, as rumor has it, spies have leaked into the secret organization.'

Add something imaginative and catchy at the end like" 'Dive into a world of demons, spies, fear and conspiracies and fight for the good of mankind.'

So it looks like this:

'Everything is picture perfect in the land of __; that is, until the king's death.As customary, a new ruler took his place-- his wife-- and with it came rumors that she killed him.Little did anyone know, she was a queen of a different world with demons ready to do her commands.The once-great land was reduced to nothing while demons roamed, killing for sport while crops stopped growing, animals died, forests burned down, people died of unknown illnesses.In the midst of the chaos emurged an underground alliance of people with one goal- to take down the queen. But, as rumor has it, spies have leaked into the secret organization. Dive into a world of demons, spies, fear and conspiracies and fight for the good of mankind with -book title-.'