Hi my muse has come to visit me, so I let run my imagination

As always, enjoy it and obviously EVERY ADVICE IS WELCOME

It was heavily foggy night , Clarence could not hear anything behind him, neither the steps of the creature coming closer, nor its blood-stained breath. The beast just appeared in front of him, and he realized that he was hopeless trapped. Gaping horrified at it the terrified man, stammered; finally he could scream, then, just the silence, the forest recovered its tranquility .As soon as the first morning beam touched his face, the blue eyes of a distracted man, peered the open sky . ( Not only, could him not remember what was he doing there, But also he did not know who was him) He could not remember, what he was doing there. Furthermore he could not know who was him. Extremely confused , he try to stand up, but a strong pain in his right leg, forced him to remain on the floor. The wound was quite deep and wet. Although he understood that he had done it recently, he was not capable of remembering the way . Actually, Clarence had forgotten how the hard-edged fangs of the creature had broken his skin and cursed him forever.

"Gaping horrified at it the terrified man, stammered" No comma?

"then, just the silence, the forest recovered its tranquility" I'm a little confused as to what just happened here?

"the blue eyes of a distracted man, peered the open sky." No comma there either - instead sya something along the lines of 'the blue eyes of a distracted man peered at the open sky - but I would not put 'the blue eyes of a distracted man' - it is a mix of third and present tenses; either put 'the distracted man opened his eyes', or reword it some other way. In any case, I'd try to cut down the adjectives there.

"( Not only, could him not remember what was he doing there, But also he did not know who was him)" A little mix up on tenses - 'not only could he not remember what he was doing there, but he could also not remember who he was.'

"He could not remember, what he was doing there." For this, either remove the comma, or add to the first part of the sentence to make sure it is complete before breaking it up with a comma? eg. 'he couldn't remember anything at all, not even what he was doing there.'

"but a strong pain in his right leg, forced him to remain on the floor" No comma there, and just before that, 'was him' is a tense mix up; it should be 'he was'.

"he was not capable of remembering the way"

He 'found himself incapable' or 'he couldn't remember', as 'not capable' on it's own is not quite the right term for this.

I like this though. 8D I am interested in what is going on - is there more?

Yes as soon as the musa came to visit me again ill write the next part

"then, just the silence, the forest recovered its tranquility" I'm a little confused as to what just happened here?

Emm I was trying to put some suspense like you read it and said what happened did it ate it? I think i could not do it LOL So much to learn about :P