hi guys cause I ask you a major favor. i would really like to know what you think of the pet description of my pets Alayla Atalante Cyrillos Mooney Sofronio (the descriptions are short so no worries, and you don't have to read all of course haha) please help cause I could do with some improvement of my writing skill

Eh, what can I say? ^_^; They're pet descriptions. You're giving their personalities without going into too much detail.

If anything, they're nicely written, with good grammar and word usage, and they're not terribly cliche, though not detailed.

It's a good summary of the pet's personalities in a few words.

thanks. yeah i haven't really had the time to properly write them haha :) glad they aren't cliche haha

Yeah, Ravel's pretty much summed it up. They're good pet descriptions, but nothing super special. If I were you, I'd add a little bit of mystery to them.

ok, ty for the advice ^^

On Alayla's description, perhaps "The ocean she is most fond lies between Sargath and Zarkiossa" should be "The ocean she is most fond of lies between Sargath and Zarkiossa"?

You seem to have missed a word out on Atalante's, as well: "If you're on her good side, will kill/die for you, but if you're on her bad side, she'll kill you." should be "If you're on her good side, she will kill/die for you, but if you're on her bad side, she'll kill you.", I think?

There's a couple of periods missing on the other pages, but aside from those they're all decently written for short pet profiles. They say what needs to be said.