It has a great rhythm :)

I agree. While I don't mind coarse language in poetry for a certain blunt, edgy tone, I think that overuse of it can be really distracting and, as a result, deprive the poem of any emotion impact in might have had.

I'd have to agree with the two posts above me - the overuse makes the poem sound unimaginative and somewhat lazily thought out. It's an okay poem, but the fact that you use 'fuck' to start pretty much every line ruins the impact. I know that the concept of the poem is 'fuck love', but when it comes to the way you've written it...less is more.

It's got a good rhythmn. However, as a reader, there's very little emotional impact or value. There's a vague realization that the tone is negative and more than likely angry and upset. The overuse of the word "fuck" takes a lot of it away. While I can see it as being a good section in a song, I can't see it working out very well as a poem on it's own just for that reason.

I like it as is. =/ When you're to the point when you're saying 'fuck love,' that's damn near the only thing going through your head. 'Fuck this, fuck that, fuck him, fuck her,' etc.

Besides I don't really get why people think that poetry has to relate-impact everyone. Poetry, I think, is for the writer themselves. After all, it is their emotion, isn't it? o.o Not to offend anyone :( I hope I didn't.

I don't like it. It sounds like you wrote it in two seconds and while heartbreak is a real motivator, teen angst is just annoying to read about.

i actually like the poem a lot. usually, the simple rhymes don't get me, but this did. (: the whole idea of the poem is "fuck this", no? so that's how it was written. the lack of emotion makes sense, to me. it fits.