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Nov 29, 2013 12 years ago
Naerina
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Yeah so I'm so lazy and busy to write it myself. I would love if it's not too expensive as I'm not that rich.

What I [b love[/b]]
science-fiction, mythology, fantasy and all sort of things related to 'fairy tale'.

You can visit Calix's page for my own writing so you could know how and what's my taste looks like.

I am seeking for some.

[b Payment[/b]]
Just name it. Reasonably. ❤

The Pets
Most of them have no description, reference or whatever. (rank from the highest priority)

  1. Curiama
  2. Flews - Writer :
  3. Bleid
  4. White Angel
  5. Crew
  6. Jiminy

(You can always start with different introduction, your own story, don't bother the existed story/description/story)

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Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
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I have (unfinished) stories on Pontiac and Kre's profiles. You can take a look and see if you can work with my writing style - which varies a lot.

Of the two, Pontiac's would be the most detailed/close to finished, and Kre's is really dialogue-heavy.

I don't have a set price and you could pay me whatever you see fit.

Do you have a set plot basis and length in mind for any of them? c:

Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
Naerina
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Actually I have no time to read all of them but I've scanned a few. You're a pretty good writer but your stories on each of them are pretty long, I like Kre's length though. And if possible, if you could do a fantasy type of story for Flews, I'd love to pay you a few cash. Plus, could you probably reduce the quantity of dialog/monolog/something with the ("")?' I would love if the story is something like telling a story instead of drama/theater. :)

I'm not sure about plot basis though. I just want it to be a fantasy story; a glade guardian or something like that. You can just do the plot or rough plan first and let me see how's it. :)

p.s : Don't hesitate to plot/make a draft, I'll tip for any work. :3

EDIT : Please note that I'd love to have stages in the story. Like an intro, body, ending. :) At least an intro and full story. ❤

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Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
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So for Flews, the story would be first person storytelling, correct?

Are there any other characters or anything specific that you'd like me to include?

The length and fantasy genre are definitely doable, I'll check in with you periodically as I make progress with the story c:

[edit] I can do that. :)

Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
Shakespeare
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Although I don't have any open slots open at the moment, if you're interested I have a shop. Examples and prices are available there as well. I have a ping group for slots; I usually finish commissions in a week or so and then open up new slots. c:

Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
Naerina
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OK if so. :) I'm looking forward to it. I need to go for now.

Edit : You can always relate the other pets into the story. She's close with Curiama as for info.

I couldn't be online as much lately so I can't be going to keep on your thread so if possible could you turn here again after you finished all the other commissions.? Thanks in advance..

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Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
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I can try to keep you in mind, but I can't really make any promises. If you'd like to join the ping group though, you can get notifications when I open up new commissions. If you're looking for something more immediately, I might be persuaded to take a bribe slot.

Else, I'll try to come back here when I have new slots open. c:

Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
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All right, here's a very rough draft. c:

It's very short so if you want me to add more detail I will do so.

The intro is told by other characters in the story, and the story itself is told by Flews.

I wasn't sure if you'd be okay with the transformation from human to animal since I'm not that familiar with writing fantasy but if not I won't mind changing the story.

Introduction It wasn't always like this, the glade. There was a time, long ago, when it was polluted, torn apart. There was a time when we couldn't hear the chirping of the birds, couldn't sit on the soft grass watching the beams of sunlight filter through the foliage and sidle down through the clear air.

I remember when they first came to the glade. They stood upright, as if somehow that made them better than us. They had cans and wrappers that they left to rot eternally but never completely. They had axes and saws that they brought to tear down the trees and lay pavement over their broken bones.

They thought they were the only ones in the world. They didn't give us a second thought.

Until there was one, the child, who came to save us.

Story The day was clear.

I was crying, I remember; I was crying because I had asked my father so many times not to cut down the tree. It was a beautiful old thing. Majestic, regal. It was older than he was, and wiser, and he saw fit to cut it down and turn it into plywood.

I went away on a field trip and when I came back it was gone.

And so I ran away. Not because I hated him but because I hated what he was doing. I was ashamed to be his daughter.

I stumbled through the forest, the one that my father was tearing apart. I could already see its vitality seeping away; the wildlife had receded into the far reaches, and the trees were looking sickly, bare.

The forest led me to the clearing. It was almost maternal, as if the branches of the old sycamores and oaks were pushing me gently toward that little den of earth.

It wasn't massive; it was a peaceful, serene little valley. Nevertheless, when I saw it I knew that it was important, and more importantly that I belonged there. I knew that I couldn't let my father destroy it.

I'd had a connection with animals and the environment since I was a child. My father would call all of the plants I kept alive when they were dying and all of the animals I'd nursed back to health "little miracles." But we both knew, somewhere deeper in our minds and our hearts, that they weren't miracles. Miracles were unattainable, coincidental things.

But I hadn't truly thought of these things and made the connection until I stumbled into the glade. The animals were so plentiful in that little hideaway crafted by Mother Nature that they seemed to have taken refuge there and abandoned the rest of the forest.

I wasn't surprised by the way they acted around me. They didn't shy away, like they usually did with other people. They approached me, tame as anything, studying me inquisitively with trusting eyes. I wondered if I should be scared.

But I wasn't.

After the discovery of the glade, I went home to my father. He was worried--he'd been out all night looking for me, he'd said.

So I asked him again to stop doing what he was doing, if only for my sake. He turned me down. Money, he'd always said, makes the world go 'round. And he wouldn't let a silly little thing like the environment stand between him and his precious money.

So I didn't ask him to stop. I put up with it, in my own way; all throughout my childhood, I'd sneak to the glade whenever I could. It was my way of coping.

The forest got weaker and weaker.

When I was 18, my father died. It wasn't as much of a loss as I'd expected it to be. The paternal hole that he'd left whenever he was out tearing trees down was filled by my evenings cleaning the forest, listening to the quiet background noises of the cicadas calling and the squirrels foraging.

I decided, once my father died, to move away. I needed to leave the place behind. I knew who the new owner of my father's company would be and I didn't want to sit and watch the glade get ripped to pieces. He was ruthless and cold, more than my father was and more than many people would ever be.

The night before I was supposed to catch my flight and leave the glade behind, I got cold feet and decided to pay the forest one last visit, just go on a little walk to give it my condolences and my grievances because it deserved every last one. It was like planning to go see a dying relative and the pain in my chest was not unwarranted.

That night, I walked barefoot into the crisp autumn air of the forest at midnight. The chill in the air felt good on my skin, like a long lost lover that had returned from some distant place. I was at peace breathing the fresh scent of the pines and hearing the snap of the twigs under my calloused feet. It was beautiful, and deafeningly quiet. No machines, no axes or saws tearing apart this little piece of heaven. Not until the morning.

I don't know how I found the glade again, in the pure dark under the welcoming sky of a million shining stars. Maybe the route was embedded in my mind, maybe some muscle memory led me there. Or maybe it was fate.

And, just like the first time, all of the animals were there. It was as if they were waiting for me, everyone accounted for. I was a little girl again.

I looked at them sadly and took the glade in the moonlight and all its beauty in. I was forcing myself to turn away and leave it behind when a doe stepped through the clearing towards me.

Emotion overwhelmed me. I fell to my knees in front of her and began to cry for everything lost and devoured and destroyed and taken by my own race.
I began to feel a tingling in my shoulder blades that gradually spread all over. It wasn't an entirely unpleasant sensation at first, but it became so painful and intense after a few moments, the feeling of wings ripping out of my back and my fingers twisting into compact hooves, that I lost consciousness. The translucent black of the night faded away into the opaque black of the mind, impermeable and impenetrable.

I awoke to the gentle tapping of three golden butterflies exploring my new, different body.

As I came to, I saw that I was surrounded, still, by the expectant faces of row upon row of creatures. I felt strong, invigorated, powerful, more so than I had ever felt as a human.

They were looking at me, waiting for me to take the first step, lead them to the reclamation of the glade. All of the animals had a role to play and they were anxious to play it.

A wolf in the crowd began to howl. Not a howl of mourning, but one of triumph.

They say that if a tree falls in the forest no one will hear it.

But they were wrong.

If a tree falls in the forest, the animals will hear it.

If you want a quick synopsis, here it is -

Plot Basis A child has a connection with the environment and is transformed into an animal to guard it against her father's company.

[edit] If you're satisfied with this I can definitely go back and relate the story to your other characters and I'll also go ahead and write an ending.

Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
Naerina
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The story seems lack of fantasy and the fairy-tale-like that I am demanding. It'd be a waste though if you erase the whole existed story that you've written.

EDIT You can relate other pets into her story as well. She's close with Curiama as for info.

Is there any empty slot for your word art. Need some for my pets.

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Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
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Okay, I can add more fantasy elements in there.

Is there anything specific that you want?

Do you want it to be more adventurous?

Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
Naerina
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Adventure is always cool. You can add other pets in her story as well. Curiama is her bff. They both love the green, the glade, the nature. I just want something like magic, power etc. Maybe something like, the power of healing, there's magic lake or whatsoever. I can't think of something cool right now, so I'm waiting for your great ideas.

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Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
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Alright, I might actually scratch the first story and start over.

I'll get back to you in a bit with the next draft. (:

Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
Naerina
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You can see my example if you can't figure my taste Here

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Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
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Yep, word art is open!

Form Things to keep in mind:

  • You're only going to see part of the image in the final word art, so look for images that'll be nice even when you only see bits and pieces. Please link to the image you'd like me to use!
  • For font, you can tell me if you have a specific (free) font in mind, or you can just describe it as cursive, serif, sans-serif, etc.

Image: Text: Font:

Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
Naerina
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Is it possible for me not to specified the image? Cause I'd love to just have color ranges like green + brown or else. And can you rotate the word art? Like 30 degree etc?

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Nov 30, 2013 12 years ago
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I can do a simple gradient (subtle fade from one color to another) without you requesting a specific image. I'm not sure what you mean by can I rotate it. I can rotate the whole word, yes, but not individual letters.

Dec 2, 2013 12 years ago
Naerina
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How's the progression?

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Dec 3, 2013 12 years ago
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@ Naerina A little bogged down with school work, will be checking back in ASAP I'll read Curiama's story and incorporate elements from that.

Dec 3, 2013 12 years ago
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Sure sure. Don't mind me, have your time and write it leisurely. Don't force yourself. :)

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Dec 24, 2013 12 years ago
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So sorry for the wait! :) Let me know if there's anything you would like changed.

Flews The week before, they had found thousands of dead fish washed up on the shore of the Peka Glade Lake. It was, they thought, some kind of waterborne plague – they on land were untouchable.

Now, though, Curiama and Flews looked at each other worriedly as they were called into the home of their dying neighbor. He was sickly and frail, and hadn’t spoken for days. But when they entered the cabin, he looked at them with tired eyes and rasped, “It’s the Plague. It has returned.”

Flews looked at Curiama fearfully. The plague was something surreal, intangible, unimaginable It hadn’t happened for hundreds of years – was stuff of legend, really, and their stomachs dropped at the thought of being in the midst of it.

Something tickled the back of Flews’ mind. Some kind of nursery rhyme or poem she had heard as a child. She struggled to remember, to form the full verse from just an inkling of a memory:

“When it comes Sickness and death in a wave Visit the wise elder tucked discreetly away For life he may give, and death he may stay.”[/I]

And so Flews and Curiama went to visit the hut of the shaman, who himself was stuff of legend and a source of fear for all of the villagers.

A gust of wind blew through the hut, though there were no windows on the walls. It looked deserted, as if no one had been there for years. Cobwebs matted the antiquated pots in the corner and a layer of dust coated the herbs which still looked suspiciously green.

Flews’ heart dropped. So there was no hope after all.

They turned to go when a rustling noise called their attention.

Peering into the darkness, Flews could make out a vague shape slumped on the far side of the room that had not been there before. As she stared at it, it stood.

It was terrible to behold; had some kind of dark power around it that drained everything around it of energy and was itself veiled in darkness. "Well, now, little adventurers, don’t go just yet,” it rasped.

Flews gathered her courage. “You’re the shaman. You’re the one who can save us,” she said pleadingly.

It took a step towards them and Curiama cringed. “Actually, children,” it said with its grating voice, “you are the ones who must save us. It is foretold. Do you not heed the prophecies?” It started to chant, its whisper-voice growing louder until it seemed a scream:

[i]“One large and one small, In stature and in courage, To save them all Must venture into the forest, And face its ancient fury, To combine fire, earth, and water, And return to the source To restore all lost purity. Every creature, one and the same Must gain back their health Amidst the cool of the clean flame.”

“Th-that’s just old wives’ tales,” Curiama stammered. “It’s not true. There’s no such thing as prophecies.”

The shaman laughed, a horrible cackle. “Say what you will, children. There is no prophecy. Only the plague, with no cure.” It continued to laugh and disappeared as if it had never been there at all.

“Wait!” Flews shouted. “Wait! Help me understand the prophecy!”

But the shaman was already gone.

Curiama looked at Flews and shuddered. “We’re going into the forest, aren’t we?” she said, dread coating her tongue.

“You can be sure of that,” Flews said, eyes hard.

As they walked through the greenery, hooves crushing twigs, they realized how decrepit it looked. Trees were losing their vitality, ferns losing their vibrance.

“The plague’s affecting the forest, too,” Flews said softly.

They continued to walk, not entirely sure of what they were looking for. The sky began to darken.

“We can’t be out here when it’s dark,” Curiama said. “You know the legends of the walking trees. And now we know that anything can be true…”

Flews nodded. “Alright, we’ll head back.”

But when they turned around, they found that their tracks were gone.

Curiama let out a little cry of astonishment. “Wh-where did our tracks go? How are we supposed to find our way back?”

“Quiet,” Flews said suddenly.

All around them, the rustling of the trees grew louder.

The branches of the trees around them were twisting, writhing, reaching towards them like snakes.

Flews closed her eyes and took a deep breath. “Run.”

They ran as the sky grew darker and eventually they were running blind. They were knocked unconscious as a giant tree root coiled around their bodies.

When Flews and Curiama came to, it was dawn and they were face to face with a menacing but inquisitive looking tree-face.

It scowled at them.

“Well, well, if it isn’t the little travelers, running through my forest with reckless abandon,” it said spitefully, with a voice that sounded older and more tired than the earth itself.

“Oh, it has been a long while since I’ve tasted blood – always this water, water, water – you know, I do like a little variety in my meals,” it continued grumpily.

Flews looked at the pink sky, willing the sun to rise. She knew that all she had to do was hold off the tree until sunrise. Just a little stalling, she thought.

“Blood?” she said. “You must be going batty – we don’t have blood in our veins. We’re made up of water. No variety here,” she said quickly.

The tree scowled and narrowed his eyes at her.

“It has been a long while,” the tree pondered, its bark grating against Flews’ coat. “Maybe my memory fails me.”

The tree made to set them down, then changed its mind. It brought Flews close to its eye. “I don’t believe you, little traveler. Prove it to me.”

“I dropped my knife,” she said. “You have to let me down so I can find it and cut myself to show you the water in my veins.”

The tree grumbled. “Why don’t I just smash you and see what color comes splashing out of you when I do so, eh?”

Flews shook her head. “No, that would just make a mess, and you would have to drink the same boring water anyway. Let me down so I can get my knife.”

As the tree set her down and began to grumble about its dry bark, she feigned to search for her knife.

“Come on, come on, come on…” she said, looking at the tiny sliver of sun coming over the hill.

The tree began to get angry and snatched her up, scratching her in the process and making her bleed. “You liar!” it screeched, and bent its arm back to smash her on the forest floor.

Just as its arm went back, the sun peeked over the hill and it froze, groaning as it lost control of its limbs.

Curiama was sniveling in the grasp of a branch near her.

She let out a deep breath and clambered out of the grasps of its branch. She was beginning to climb down when a flicker caught her eye. A small branch, thinner than her arm, was burning.

Suddenly, words of the prophecy came back to her.

“…to combine fire, earth, and water…”

“Curiama!” she yelped, “Help me break this branch off!”

“What now?” Curiama asked, once they were back on the floor. “We’ve got fire, and we’ve got earth, but what about water?”

Flews paused. “Wait. Do you remember the line in the prophecy? ‘To return to the source?’ We know where this thing started.”

“The lake!” they said in unison.

It didn’t take long to get back to their village, though the branch that was miraculously still burning did fetch them some strange looks. They pushed past people, running for the lake.

Curiama cocked back her arm and let the burning branch sail, leaving an arc of fire in the air.

The moment it hit the water, the atmosphere changed.

There was a moment of complete silence, breathlessness, and then they gasped, breathing in pure air.

Above the river, impossibly, danced a ten foot high inferno. Curiama started at the sound of fish jumping in the water. They hugged each other and cheered, and went back to the village to spread the news.

And so it was, the prophecy, that every creature, one and the same, gained back their health in the clean flame.

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