After a couple of years (yea, I got SUPER BUSY for a bit. Real life sucks sometimes), I had some time to work on Raiden's story as well as a bit of organizing his TC, and I want to see if he's Pet Spotlight ready.

The Major Change: His story's not as big, plus, the parts I kept from the original source (the Metal Gear Wiki) have been put between parts of the original story I did for him, since I wanted to keep those parts as they're part of how he is, plus, the original story alludes to what happens in one of them.

I'm hoping that this revision is good enough for him to eventually get to be in the Pet Spotlight, but we'll just see, right? Thanks ahead of time to any suggestions!

It's a nice place to start with a fanpet, I feel! I like the format you use for the story-- combining original story with original source is essentially what I do with fanpets, it makes for something new and refreshing while sticking to what's already established.

I have a few observations:

1. The scrollbar for the treasure chest seems to be in a bit of a weird place with how it's not centered relative to the TC box in the profile image. I hope you get what I mean? I think it'd look way better if it was centered either vertically or horizontally, or both.

2. The profile feels a little plain-- which, while not a bad thing, could be fixed up a little. The pet name at the bottom especially seems lacking, the Comic Sans really doesn't go well with the rest.

3. In the parts of the story that you've written yourself, there needs to be more spacing going on. It all kind of melts together when I try to read it because there's no empty space to pace dialogue and descriptive writing. That's kind of a personal pet peeve, though, so you'll have to see what others think of it.

3.5. Even with the official backstory, the story seems really long. And I can totally get behind that-- I write a ton of really long stories, too. But I feel that there's information in there that may not be completely necessary; I would suggest going through it and seeing what's really relevant to what you're trying to bring across here. Are previous stories and adventures for your character necessary for everything else, or are they just background fluff? Are there relationships that need to be fully explained that aren't covered? I'd look at that with a critical eye and see what can be cut out, added, or otherwise tweaked to present exactly what you feel is important/relevant. It's simply really important, especially with a fanpet. And you can always tell story through stuff besides writing, too: for example, I did this with my pet The Undying. Her story focuses on a specific, pivotal event in her presentation as a character, but her treasure chest references other parts about her character that aren't covered whatsoever in her story, like her interest in playing the piano or her preferred type of tea.

4. Since you use the same color text for everything besides links and the statbars, it all really kind of fuses into a visual mess for me. I would recommend using different colors for your italics, bold and underlining, and use those as tools to help break things up, or use more accent colors in the profile image itself.