Up above Yanmas zoom about the jungle as Butterfrees flutter by, down below wanders a being. A being completely foreign to the inhabitants of the wilderness around it. The sun illuminates the though the thick upper canopy of leaves overhead, just enough to make the being squint. And so, it does as it continues to venture deeper and deeper into the middle of nowhere. A puddle ripples in the wake of sudden movement then the water splashes as it’s forced to make way for a footprint. A human’s footprint. In the blink of an eyes, the Pokémon scurry and evade the inevitable. They scurry to evade capture.

Professor Palm’s sun kissed skin grew beads of sweat, but she was relentless in her pursuit to study the creatures of this rainforest. She had lived in a nearby village ever since she was a child and with great curiosity, she longed to learn about all the Pokémon that shared her habitat. She knew she was destined to become the next Pokémon Professor. So, with great determination she continued on her never ending quest to see what the forest could offer her.

Just as Professor Palm was about to take another step, she couldn’t help but notice a funny feeling. Something was slowly creeping up her leg. In an instant, she looked down. Soon she discovered a vine wrapped around her leg. She thought nothing of it and prepared to take a knife to it. However, that wasn’t going to work.

With a sudden yank, the young Pokémon Professor took to the air. She was a good few feet above the ground just hanging by a mere vine of a mysterious origin. Her eyes widened and her heart raced. Heights of any kind, weren’t exactly something she was fond of. A wave a nausea washed over her. She struggled to breathe, but had no idea why. Little did she know, a poison settled into the air.

When she woke, she fell witness to the most hideous sight she had ever seen. An oblong plant of some sort drew itself closer and closer to her. With its back to her and its attention seemingly focused on her backpack of researching belongings. With a vine like hand, it turned the bag upside down emptying the bag of all it’s the contents. Papers scattered and knick-knacks fell.

“Hey!” The professor boomed, “What do you think you’re doing!?”

The plant’s actions came to halt as it turned around. It stood upright on one end and had a pair of pale pink lips on the other. Its leaves ruffled in the wind. Its eyes widened with shock. The young woman rose to her feet and picked up her knife from the forest floor. She lunged toward the plant, but it jumped back. For something nearly twice her size, it had quite the agility.

This isn't quite done, but what are your thoughts on this fan pet based story?

Hi there! I read through this and was honestly expecting something completely different. You start out in present tense then change to past tense, which is a bit confusing. Some of the writing is a little bit clunky, but I do like that you've made up your own Professor here. Or maybe not, I just did a quick google search and I think Palm might be the name of the new professor in the seventh generation?

Overall, your story definitely has potential, but I think it needs more work (which you said it wasn't done so that's a given). I expect the plant that attacked her is a Victreebel, which kinda seems like she should recognize it as a Pokemon professor. It surprised me that she lunged at a Pokemon with a knife, does she not have any Pokemon of her own to battle with? Since she came there to catch Pokemon, I would think that she'd want to capture this Victreebel.

Here are some of my general thoughts:

• I think you should consider making the species names lowercase. You wouldn't say "A Giraffe was walking." I know that's just how the games do it, but technically if we're speaking grammatically, it would be more proper to use them in lowercase. If you're referring to a pokemon whose name is the same as their species, though, you can capitalize their name when you refer to it just like normal.

• The random shift in tense needs to be fixed.

• "Just as Professor Palm [...] However, that wasn’t going to work." This is a really awkwardly worded paragraph. Your usage of "Soon," for example, seems really unfitting for the situation.

• I can't tell if this is a good or bad thing, but it's really odd to me that your story simultaneously feels very involved and engaging, but at the same time feels like someone is just telling me a story without any real excitement about it. I can't really explain it. The content just doesn't really fit with the way you tell it, I think is what I'm trying to say.

• "With its back to her and its attention seemingly focused on her backpack of researching belongings." is an incomplete sentence.

• "'Hey!' The professor boomed" "The" should probably be lowercase, even though TECHNICALLY it could be correct. If you're writing it like this: "That's nice," she said, "but I don't care." then you should use lowercase. If you aren't intending to have it like that, I think you should consider doing it that way because it flows much more nicely.

• I kind of agree with Write about what she said in regards to how the professor should recognize that it's a pokemon, but I don't necessarily think she has to know what it is immediately. I think she should take a good look at it and be like "Oh! That's probably a pokemon! Let me whip out my Dex to see what this thing is." Of course, maybe that exact reaction can't happen because it's attacking her, but something similar maybe? I don't think she would be attacking a pokemon with a knife after she figures out what it is either.

I'd love to read a secondary draft when/if you'd like to show us!

We actually don't know anything about the 7th gen yet, and we won't know until around April 14th! We just know that Sun and Moon are MOST LIKELY the 7th generation, but even that's not 100% confirmed yet.

Thanks for the input guys!

I haven't written anymore as of yet or have started the process of revising.

Honestly, I almost forgot about this pet backstory thing. :(

But this has given me a bit more motivation to write more! :D

(Though, I'm currently working on developing an original character... I'll get back to it someday!)

Yeah, unfortunately nothing has been confirmed just yet (besides that it is coming). I think we can all agree that Sun/Moon is the 7th generation, even if they haven't officially confirmed it. As I said, he might be the new professor, but there's no telling!

I personally like the idea of another female professor. As far as the games go, there has only been Juniper, yeah?

Anyways! Good luck working on your pet and the original character you're also developing! I've thought about making a Pokémon fanpet myself, but unfortunately my favorite is already taken (Houndoom)!

I'm happy to have helped motivate you to write some more! I would love to see the finished product, so ping me whenever you get around to it please. ^^

I actually really hope the professor is an older Bianca, even though I don't think that will EVER happen, haha. I'm just so excited about Pokemon again that I'm letting my imagination kind of go wild with speculation and things I want.

I really hope we get more Fairy types that aren't super cutesy and more early-game Dragons. And I hope they give poor Grass types a much needed buff of some sort. ;_;