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Nov 11, 2015 10 years ago
Yer a wizard
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I just finished the story of my pet Eyvor and i was wondering if she's ready for the pet spotlight :)

English is not my mother tongue so if the text needs to be corrected, let me know! If there's something else you need to tell me about the profile, please do! I worked really hard on this baby <3

Thank you!

Nov 13, 2015 10 years ago
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lovely profile, and the story is beautifully written! a couple of corrections (changes in bold):

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(paragraph 1)
Eyvor stood on top of the mountain with the whole world at her feet. Behind her lay Fenrir, son of Loki.
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only a pelt of wolf skin atop of his or her clothes.</p>
<p>(paragraph 3)
Finally he was free, spreading his maw as wide as he could.</p>
<p>(paragraph 4)
At the field, the siblings were once again reunited with their father, taking their fighting position as they waited for the gods to descend from Asgard.
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Odin’s son Vidar avenged his father by ripping open Fenrir’s maw.</p>
<p>(paragraph 5)
In return, she stabbed her sword in Vidar’s back, piercing his heart and lungs.
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Land cracked, swallowing all the dead and living creatures. Everything was sucked into the midst of the universe, where the world would be restored once again, piece by piece.

Nov 13, 2015 10 years ago
Yer a wizard
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Thank you! <3

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