This is a Hobbit AU fanfiction.
“You only have one job. One job that is more important than *anything(, do you understand Thorin? You take care of Frerin, make sure he stays happy and healthy.â€
“Yes momma.â€
Take care of Frerin.
“Torin!â€
“Wha… What did you say Frer?â€
“Torin! Torin!â€
“MOOOOOM! Frerin said his first word!â€
“What!?â€
“Torin!â€
Take care of Frerin.
“It’s okay Frer it’s just a scrape. I got you baby brother.â€
“It hurt.â€
“I know. Want me to kiss it to make it better?â€
“Uh huh.â€
“There. Does it feel better?â€
“Uh huh.â€
“Good.â€
Take care of Frerin.
“Where the hell were you!?â€
“I just stepped out for a minute honest!â€
SMACK
“Damn it Thorin what have I told you?â€
“My only job is to take care of Frerin. Frerin is the most important thing.â€
“That’ right. Now pack your shit, we have to leave NOW.â€
Take care of Frerin.
“I’m hungry Thorin. When is mom coming home?â€
“I don’t know Frer… here take the rest of mine.â€
“Are you sure?â€
“Yeah. I’m full.â€
“My aren’t you a handsome boy! How much for an hour?â€
Take care of Frerin.
“What do you mean you’re dropping out of high school?â€
“I’m not smart like you little brother, it’s better this way. No wasting time on stuff I can’t understand. I’ll be able to get hours at the jobs that will hire me. We’ll be able to pay for stuff with actual money if mom is gone longer than she plans.â€
It’ll also be easier to keep an eye on you this way.
“Well… if you’re sure…â€
Take care of Frerin.
“Damn it Ambrdeth yer being an idgit!..... Don’t you walk away from me woman!â€
“Don’t act like you know what I’m thinking!â€
“I know enough! Look at Thorin! He’s got a broken leg and you don’t care!â€
“Don’t Fundin.â€
“Come on kids we’re leaving!â€
“But mom me and Dwalin are….â€
“Now Frerin!â€
“And if I see yer idgit ass back on my property I’ll fill it full of buckshot!â€
Take care of Frerin.
“You let him leave?â€
“He wanted to.â€
“You let him leave.â€
“He’ll be happier and safer there.â€
“Mom?â€
“Don’t talk to me right now Thorin… I’m so disappointed in you right now.â€
Take care of Frerin… Well I did and now I have nothing left to do...
Are you planning of adding any prose that isn't dialogue?
If not, then I'd suggest writing/formatting this in the same format as a screenplay.
Just a suggestion. :3
I can't decide if I want to add anything to it to tell the truth... I can see where I can add but I'm not sure if it would subtract from what I already have,
Oh, I see... Well, honestly I know nothing about the Hobbit, so I can't really help you much with how to continue...
I guess I could try, but I might misinterpret the characters since I don't know the whole story the original author planned for them, if you see what I mean... :c
I completely understand. ^^
Thank you for your suggestion about writing as a screenplay.