English is not my first language, so I wanna make sure if everything's correct grammarwise :) It would be really nice if someone could check out the beginning of Jackal Pup's profile story and point out mistakes. I don't need any critique, it's just an introduction and too short to be worth any critique ;)

My edit of the beginning of Jackal Pup's profile story:

"Bright sunlight shines through the dark tree leaves. A handful of flies buzz around the body on the floor, sitting on its craggy nose, crawling into its ears, feeding upon the last liquid of its eyes. The only motion in the body are maggots wriggling, eating meat that not even the summer sun can warm up again. A dead pup. Or is it? Every once in a while, when someone passes by, it lifts up its head and stares through glazed eyes at the traveler only to notice that it's not the one it's been waiting for. The pup is neither dead nor alive, but waiting for the day an old friend will return. A day that will never come."

I reworded a couple of things and fixed some comma and semi-colon usage. Use it, don't use it, it's up to you. :)

Thank you for helping! I guess I'll use it. One thing: Is there another possible notion than "a handful of flies"? That sounds so... handy? xD Sorry, I don't know how to explain that, but I'm kinda struggling with that right now. The rest I really like, thanks again :)

I know what you mean about using the word "handful". It doesn't sound quite right to me either. I looked up "group" on Thesaurus.com (http://thesaurus.com/browse/group?s=t ) to see if anything jumped out at me as an appropriate replacement but nothing did. Take a look, perhaps you'll find a word that you like better! :D

Edit: Oh, and you're welcome for the help. If you need any more, let me know. I'm a Creative Writing major so this is my "thing". :)

Thanks for the link, I'll look it up :) I really love writing, but in another language it's a bit more tricky :D