Hi there :D .. I would be ever so grateful if you could rate my pet Luna-'s page. I would one day make it eligible for the pet spotlight so anything you can see that can help would be great!

I have had a new overlay made. I have had the whole story grammar checked and in my opinion i have made all the colours seem to blend nicely with each other. (I say I .. I mean I have asked some very kind people to)

So please, have a look, have a read and tell me what you think of Luna-'s profile! :D

Link to Luna-'s Profile

I remember reading Luna-'s profile before, and I really like the story. c: It's amazing how long distance relationships can really last! The story might be quite long for some people, though! I found it fine since I'm used to reading, though. Oh, is it possible to link to the picture that your friend took in the story when it's mentioned? Just a suggestion. c: Everything seems PS-eligible, actually, but I suggest positioning the text to the left instead of the center? It's just my personal preference, but it always seemed easier since, you know, people are pretty much used to reading from left to right, if you get what I'm saying? lD Hope this helps!

Everything I list is only a suggestion; every edit is up to you, of course! :) Love the story as I know it is truth for many.

Thanks; the coloring is easy on the eyes! ❤

Why does he talk to his computer? Well, I assume it's an internet group anyway. There are grammer errors littered throughout the story which you need to comb out, such as the following and more. "Me fingers flew across the keyboard." What is your favorate flower? (needs quotatoins around it to follow suit with he previous typed responces)

There could defifently be more semicolos or commas instead of so many short sentances, just make sure ot only use one , or ; per sentance.

In this there is the notion of never meeting each other and living do far away repeated multiple times, though this is realistic since it's a painful active feeling throughout this story, so good for you making this as emotional as it would be realistic/relateable writing; the kiss scene is just a meaningful as it should be! ❤

“Give me your camera!” demanded your friend.

My friend? I thought it was Luna-'s friend.

If you don't want to go over it again, I offer to clean it up for you (because I love it) only changing the grammer you approve of and keeping a list of what I edit for you.

I agree with ; aligning the text to the left is what many people prefer.

Why is Luna~ unhappy looking in the human image?

oooh Linking the picture when its mentioned is a great idea!! :D .. I will do that

Ahh ok I will try to figure out how to position it all left .. thankies

Thanks, I am glad about the colouring. The reason He (I) am talking to the computer is because its a Long Distance Relationship over the internet. So the computer is what is used to communicate with her (Luna-)

I would be more than happy for you to correct any grammar errors ^_^

Awww thank you!! :D ... I tried to make it as emotional as it was for me in real life

The story is written from my point of view, the guy, so your friend would be correct because it was Luna-s friend.

Luna- is the girl, I am the guy. I realize what the picture looks like xD ... I need to get the guy blushing somehow, he is meant to be blushing not looking sad ^^

Thanks so far for the great comments!!

Wonderful, glad I could help. c: Here, find the part with this and just plug this in; it should do the trick! body,font,td,a,p,table,div,tr{ color: ; font-family:verdana; font-size:11px; text-align: left;}

Thanks!! .. That worked!

You're welcome! Good luck with the spotlight! c:

Thanks soo much!!

Here is the first bit, I'll do the rest later unless you'd rather I back off?

I would never have known that joining that site on that typical wet, October day would lead to this The comma there is not needed. Typical wet? "Well I am over 18!" I said. “Lets join, what's the worst that could happen?" ” Why does he talk verbally to his computer? I had been a part of the group nearly 2 months,. The comma there is not needed We even had the Hotsprings thread, which we laughed in, among other things happening in there. Hot springs is two words. But soon I noticed something odd in my notice bar. Noticing something in your notice bar makes you type the same word in a sentence twice which is redundent; how about you saw something in your notice bar? Turns out it was her. This is the irst time you refer to Luna~ as her so why not put her name so it is clearer to whom your referring otherwise it would be taken as Luna being the one speaking instead of you speaking of the relationship with her. But this was your showing how kind you are. How much you worry about your friends. For the first time, I saw what a large caring heart you have. Your should be you Back and forth we sent pm's. pm's does not require an apostrophe. It is simply PMs We talked about pur interests, what we were doing, as well as other random questions. Nisce use of commas; pur is spelt incorrectly. What's your favorite color? Mine was Red, where your's was Teal! your's does not need to be apostrophized. But then you said something. Something that I never thought possible; “I have feelings for you” How about a semicolon instead of two sentences? You don't think my point of view of adoring my loved ones is too crazy. Why not a comma after view and getting rid of the 'of' Plus we have a lot of things in common. A comma could go after There are no grammer colds, thankfully

no no please continue!! Those are all fantastic suggestions and fixes!! Thanks soo much

Then one day I saw post, that would change everything, I knew I just had to reply to it. You saw a post.

So I fanatically typed out my response.Tick. Tick. Tick. There needs to be a spare between response. And Tick

me fingers flew across the keyboard; My needs to be caped and replace me Me should be my and there should be a space between the sentences

But this was your showing how kind you are.How much you worry about your friends. For the first time, I your should be you A space or semicolon needs to be between these sentences, or it needs a space to separate them.

Finally the airport, and then the plane. Finally needs a comma after it.

My love for you grew even more. I had never loved someone as much as you. You could easily put a semicolon so the period would be unneeded. Semicolon is ;

Thanks soo much! :D

Anytime; I love your subject matter! Internet dating. :P lol

Thank you!! .. glad you like the subject! and everything in that story you fixed is true btw :)

I'm glad I could help, I was worried you would think I was being pushy or something

No no I didnt think you were being pushy ^^ .. I am grateful for all help I get because I would love to one day be accepted on the Pet Spotlight .. So all help is gratefully recieved

lol, good! I'm so glad you didn't take it in a way I never meant, all the best luck to you! :D