Okay, so Jaqen Hghar was nominated for pet spotlight but he was kicked off sometime in the past day. Can someone help me figure out why he was rejected so I can fix it? I use Chrome, does the profile look good for Firefox and IE users? Does the story make sense and is it easy to follow along for everyone?

Maybe you guys can look at the profile and see something I missed?

it looks fine in firefox! I think it makes sense, but then again I watch the show and read the books lol (BTW I LOVE THIS GUY!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS BEAUTIFULNESS!)

lol thanks. :) Lady Stoneheart is still in the running and I hope she will win the night that her character comes in the series. (but that would be the last episode ;--; )

The story look okay too? Is it too long?

Mm, Jaqen Hghar, why are you so fiiinneee? :P

hahaha I know, he is fiiiinnnee! The story looks perfect, I've seen others that have won that are too long and I give up reading them. Perhaps could help?

I noticed a few small things that might need a little tweaking? First the text in the credits might look a little better in a smaller size? and decrease the height of that div so it doesn't go over the photo? Also I noticed while reading the story, you've used the phrase 'a man' quite a lot and I'm not sure if that was intended but it might help to trim that back and use descriptions? since you seem to want to avoid using his name. :)

I'm not certain, but I wonder if the story has something to do with why it was rejected. I think your story could be a problem because you're really only retelling something that's already been written by someone else, instead of writing something new and original that's just inspired by someone else's work.

That is how Jaqen talks. He never says anyone's names really, he says general pronouns when talking about someone and he always talks in third person.

I thought I did say it was inspired by George R.R. Martin...or did someone else in Subeta write the story?

Maybe it's too much inspired to be an original story?

Is that a thing? Pie Maker was inspired by the original story. I just summarized his life before the events of Pushing Daisies in the way the narrator would say it (i love how the narrator talks in that, hehe.).

How does it look now?

Yeah, but it's not inspired by it, it is it. I'm not a huge GoT fan, but as far as I can tell it's the exact same as the original, just retold in your own words. There's a different between writing from inspiration of someone else's characters/setting/plot and rewriting the exact scene that someone else has already written. Your story isn't original and it's not really your own work, because those characters belong to someone else and so does the scene that you've described.

I couldn't rewrite Lady and the Tramp and claim it as my own work, but I could take the character Lady and write her into an original piece of fan fiction, because then the plot would be my own work, with the character inspired by the original. Does that make sense?

Hmm, I have no idea? Any mistakes? Do you have a proof reader? Maybe the text is too dark for the background .. @ Dunedainsith

Yeah, what said is pretty much my point too.

Well, the overall plot is the same, but the details on how the men died is from me. In a couple of the deaths in the book, you dont know how they died. The book just said "(insert name here) was dead three days later...." and like i said above, Pie Maker's was retold from Wikipedia and he won. I summarized the events that the show gives of his childhood throughout the series and told them the way the narrator would tell it. How is this one different unless it is not the proper rating? Or the person who read it couldn't read it because they are colorblind and cant read brown on black? Hmm..

No mistakes, my friend proofread it. I was thinking that it was too dark...i can see someone having troubles.

Make all the physical change and then see if it goes through. If not, the story might be the issue :)

I think the layout itself looks fine, but there are a few minor things... such as in the writing, when Arya is listing her names, you have a mix of "…" and just normal periods. I think it looks sloppy, I would get rid of the pasted "…" and just trail off with three normal periods...

Also:

It is fine that Jaqen refers to himself as "a man" and Arya as "a girl" when talking, because that is something that he does, but the narration shouldn't - I think it should just say "Jaqen held up three fingers for emphasis." It should be fixed in the other parts of the passage as well.

Another thing is, your story seems to change tense a bit in some parts, such as:

Should be "Three days passed..."

Like I said, I don't know that this is the reason why, I'm just speculating and trying to help you figure out why it was rejected, like you asked.

I still think that the story lacks a great deal of original work and may be too close to already existing pieces of work. I also think that it does differ from your other pet, as your story was created based on Wiki information, which you manipulated into a story and cleverly mimicked the style of the narrator. I just don't see that level of creativity in the GoT pet, all I see is a rewritten story.

Just to prove a point, you say in your credits: "I take no credit nor claim ownership whatsoever for the character or story." Surely this is you admitting "none of this work is my own" and therefore backs up my point about lack of original work. If neither the character or the story is your ownership - what is? What part of the pet is original work worthy of the spotlight?

Sorry if this comes across as harsh, I'm not meaning to be mean, I'm just trying to get across my views on it. And it could well be something else that's the problem. >.<

Oh. pfttt...me and my stupid tense changes...I find I do that quite alot in writing ;--; English is my first language but it seems grammar is lost on me.

I tried to convey that Jaqen was telling the story, but maybe that wont work as well as i thought...

And i think Ill just put commas after the names when Arya says them. That may work better.

K, thanks :)

Oh, i guess I should change the wording on that...Someone probably thought I copied it right from somewhere. Sorry if i came off as difficult, i get lost easily :/ I am kind of ditsy....

Nono. Don't worry about it. Sorry if I came across as harsh, I hope you figure it out. :)