once upon a time there was a giant forest that was divide by a raging river. On one side lived the fairies and on the other side lived the toragones a group of people that are warriors that hold a grudge to the fairies for destroying the bridge to the fairy side of the forest. one dat a teen fairy named Rosa saving a baby bird when it's wings got stuck in tree branches. The ground started to shake and she heard a horse trot and she followed the sound to the river. She found a boy around her age on a horse running from a giant ogre. O my; she said and then she said a spell. O i hope i get this right. this raging ogre has so much energy so drain his energy for him to rest. she said and then ogre had fallen asleep but when he fell he knocked the boy in to the dangerous ragging river. She jumped in and saved him. How can I ever thank. he said. You thank me but i better fly you back over to your land before you get in trouble, my name is Rosa by the way. she said. my name is Lance and i am actually the prince of Toragone I was ogre hunting and I ended up being hunted. He said. Well prince Lance lets fly over this river, she said, then he climbed on her back and she tried to fly but she is not as powerful to fly. Sorry I just earned my wings I'm still learning. Let me take you to the elders maybe they can help you. she said. and she takes him deeper into the fairy side of the forest. Grandma Alice can you help me the prince of Toragone was ogre hunting and fell in the river and i saved him can you fly him back over the river? she said and everything went silent

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while the prince was on the fairy side the prince's pet bat saw what happend and told his father King Theo and he went storming towards the river

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Rosa's grand mother had started to walk toward the river. Why do are people hate each other so much. she said. Well when the forest was in harmony the Torgones which was ruled by my grand father decided to build a bigger castle but there was no room so he decided to put it on the fairy land and promise that they would leave some trees but they fairies would be afraid they take advatage of there land so when the when the were about to cross with there torches to burn the trees the fairies used there powers to have there torches burn the bridge and ever since they have held the grudge. he said. wow. she said and they headed to the river were the Rosa's grandmother and Lances father were arguwing. ok here is the deal I will fly you over but never come back. Alice said and she flew him back over the river one day while rosa was practicing flying she heard someone calling her name and she followed it to the river. It was Lance on a raft rowing across the river on a raft. I never really got to thank you, so thank. Lance said. Your quite welcome and wont you get in trouble. She said. My father naps at this time and this forest is so deep no one can see us, you look very pretty today, lance said. Thank you, you look nice to. She said. I got to go i think someone it coming i will see you tommorow. He said. Its a date. She said and then he rowed back to the other side. for the last 5 months he would cross the river on the raft to see her and the one day............. I brought you some flowers and i have some good news and bad news. He said. What. She asked. Well the bad news is my father is very sick and the good news is that is retiring his spot as king and i will become king. he said. that is wonderful. she said. and then they kissed for the first time to be continued.............

It seems like you've tried to work on using paragraphs instead of just one big text block, but I beseech you (sorry too much Shakespeare than is healthy) to indent. Personally, I think that the text still kind of looks like a big chunk of text block, and I imagine using indents would induce less headaches.

I'm guessing you mean day, and your sentence does not make much sense when you think about. If you're having trouble with proper grammar I'd suggest speaking your sentences aloud to see if they sound funny at all to you...

Not sure why you're using a semicolon there, might I suggest using quotation marks (" ") for when characters are speaking?

Aside from other spelling and grammatical errors, when talking about skipping five months I'd give that it's own line, and maybe put something like "****" on top of it like you see in books when time passes in it.