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May 24, 2009 16 years ago
eyescoldlemonade
is a survivor
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Is this any good? I write ALOT of poetry crap so just wondering if it's useless or not.


Keep your eyes off what is mine I'm done pretending things are fine. I know what you all think of me. I wish you could just let me be. I know you really don't agree. But please ignore the things you see. Do not stare at the scars. I won't spend life behind these bars. The smile painted on my lips. Lock my heart beneath the crypts. Keep your feelings far away. Ignore the coffin in which I lay. Don't you see I'm skin and bones. I don't want to live my life all alone.

By Lillian MarylynneAnne Olin.

"Every time I find the meaning of life, They change it."

May 25, 2009 16 years ago
Skulduggery
is forever on a quest for more pets
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The rhymes aren't forced, so that's good but it's a pretty average poem. I'm the editor-in-chief of a high school literary magazine so I read a lot of similar poems. I'm also a fan of free verse but can respect rhymes that flow well together.

The poetry you write is not useless though. I think it's great you put thought into your work and have the courage to let others read it. Keep it up :3

Married to my editor wife, love of my life October 5, 2017 <3

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