so today i finished the pet profiles belonging to cecelia and petunia (finally).

does anyone have any constructive criticism on the writing i've done, or can anyone help me improve the character development?

what d'ya think?

edit; just finished primrose too.

I adore the way the profiles are made. The items in the treasures match perfectly. I don't see anything that needs to be changed.

Wonderful work!

Don't change anything. :)

I love the Profile style ~ it's all so simple and almost plain looking, but also so nice and well sorted. And the little pictures on the Profiles make it interesting to look at. ^-^

The Treasures are really matching.

(And ... Cecelia's story made me a bit sad now... :emo: )

I like your writing style. :o

Alex!

They're both great. I agree about Cecelia's story...I actually want to help her. o; Petunia's is cute.

The simplicity of the profiles is wonderful, I mean it's so neat and well-proportioned that I want to use it. :x

i just finished primrose's too. i didn't do a 'history' because her 'about' was so long and detailed, and i think it sums up her lifestyle pretty well.

thanks for the lovely posts!

I adore all of them.

The only critique I have would be for in Primrose's story, you switched between first-person point of view and third person point of view a couple times. Like...

Besides that, they're lovely. I really like your writing style. (: