Broken Dreams

(V1) dark fusion purity

when your sleeping some times you awake and your still dreaming

could you beat them are you better

better than this race raped, confused in discrase are you alone...

stride with the power with your dignity asside for what you are about to do can never be forgiven

(V2) are you alone repeat x 3 I'm coming for you

are you alone do you wait or hide

are you alone...

{towards end of tune 4 beat} are you alone * repeat til bridge beat two*

(V3)

was it your fault

is it but a dream

so rotten

just awake from your hollow sleep and should you survie your now repeat x3 {2 beats}

{towards end of tune 4 beat} your now whisper

(v4) all alone

I'm just a corprate monkey

some times it seems difficult but its not all that hard awaken embrasements all thats left to do until its all over just leave now

its time now just leave

leave them rot

(V5) {verse towards end of tune 4 beat}

corprate monkey

left in discrase raped and forgotten seeing their face

all alone now

corprate monkey

repeat corprate monkey {till time out.}

Well, you've got a few spelling errors, if those bother you? But otherwise it seems like it could be an okay song given the right tone, though a bit too violent for my taste.

thank you, and its a rough draft so spellings not important atm :) cheers love. x

I think the words don't flow well. Is it supposed to be metal?

I agree Animetra, the words don't seem to flow well and the song doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me. From what the lyrics are saying it almost looks as though you've combined a song about being stuck as a corporate monkey, some song about someone hunting another person, and then a song about some kind of regret.

the corporate monkey part kinda made me giggle.

sounds like it would make a decent screamo song [imo] but if your going for a different genre i might tone it down a bit :]