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Jul 1, 2009 16 years ago
MetallicDragon
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Here's the plot, but it could be better. Can you help me to make it sound more interesting so people might actually want to join?

Ebony Perkiton has finally met the guy of her dreams. Sure, their both only sixteen, but everything seems perfect when she's with him. They are deeply in love and he just asked her to prom! She is soaring high until the new girl moves in.
Ebony quickly learns that the new girl likes her boyfriend and would do anything to steal him. Unluckily for Ebony, the girl is a witch, literally. 
Before she can even blink Ebony finds herself in a different body. Not just any body either, she's looks just like the new girl. Upon getting to school she sees herself. Well, not really herself, but her body walking down the hall holding hands with her boyfriend. 
When she tried to confront them, she was cornered by one of the many guys in her grade. "Hey uh... I don't know your name but... Do you maybe... want to go to prom with me?" He asked softly. This is when Ebony realized her luck had finally run out. She had always hated this guy but, unable to hurt his feelings, she accepted.
With prom only a few days away can Ebony find some way to return to herself and stop the witch before she ruin everything?
Jul 1, 2009 16 years ago
Sifix
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Luna

This seems interesting, and I'd love to join. I would suggest a spell check - their should be they're and defferent should be different, for instance. It would also be an idea to write everything in the same tense. Yup, that's all I have to say. Good luck. :)

Jul 1, 2009 16 years ago
MetallicDragon
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Alright, thanks!

Jul 1, 2009 16 years ago
MetallicDragon
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true... Hmm let's see.

Jul 1, 2009 16 years ago
Sifix
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Luna

How about Ebony's best friend or such, who is very doubtful about what Ebony's saying about the transformation? That's pretty much the only one I can think of right now.

Jul 1, 2009 16 years ago
MetallicDragon
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Yeah, I thought of that, I just could not find a way to write him/her into the plot.

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