Well, truth to tell, I have /no/ idea what was going on, or how this in anyway could be made into a story, but for a prologue, it was good. Mysterious, taunting you to turn the page, everything you need to keep the readers going. But can you explain the plot before my head explodes?
Hmm....Could work out, all depends on if you're a good writer. My mind, Stephanie myer: o.K. plot, bad writer. Uglies/Pretties/Specials(Bad memory night...ugh.): Bad characters, great writer. Probably not the best examples, if you haven't read the book's.