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Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
carocake
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[edit] no more redlines, please, i fniished! ❤️

I am working on a commission for and so far I really like how it is coming out! Here is the sketch thus far:

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(I've already changed the eyes to make them normal sized haha)

I would mostly like help with the legs/feet, and the arm to the left(holding the tree), plus any other mistakes you see. So everything, hahha

I WOULD REALLY APPRECIATE IT! ❤️

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Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
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very good! I think the arm holding the book/something and the arm in the tree are different lengths

I really love it though ❤️

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Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
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I think it looks fine : D

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Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
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There's still some mistakes in it, but I wanted to show you how you could add some curves to the image. I think what might be throwing you off is that her limbs look a little too cylinder. Like for example the elbow part of the forearm is thicker than the part of the forearm that meets the wrist. The two other things that I'd suggest are making the back leg (straight one) more connected to her butt and the other leg's shin a little more short.

Other than that it's coming out great. :D It's a difficult pose but I think you're defidentally on your way.

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Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
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the hand should be strechted forward i think.

I would redline it but paint hates me and i don't have a tablet.

I also think the foot is a ietsy pietsie to big. As for the arm holding the tree all you have to do there is make it a bit smaller towards the tree most arms have a kinda triangular shape.



Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
carocake
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Thank you both~

, that redline really helps, especially the arm at the tree.

, i totally agree about the foot, i always make them too big or too small. plus, the shoe the character wears is platforms, so it makes it even bigger!

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Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
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First of all, I always flip a picture horizontally to find mistakes easier. Like, if you look at something when it's flipped horizontally and something looks off, you know there's gotta be stuff to fix. I apologize for the faint opacity of the original sketch but it makes it easier to see the red lines.

K, onto actual critique. Your basic human anatomy is very good; there's no uber long limb or like too much proportion problem. However, when moving onto a more advanced form of anatomy, there are certain things to be pointed out.

Everything that I write will be critiqued as the FLIPPED (horizontally) picture. And when I refer to the left and right, it's ALWAYS from our view, not the character's

The red lines are the actual red lines whereas the green lines are more of a 'guide' line to see if it follows the direction facing throughout the picture.

  1. First of all, it's easy to get into a drawing with the poses you have in mind. The thing that first looked 'off' to me was the shoulders. There isn't really anything 'wrong' with it in terms of anatomy. However, real life placement should be taken into consideration. If you're grabbing onto something with one arm/hand, the other one should be relatively relaxed. You don't want a picture to look really stiff and having the limbs react naturally will reduce that.

  2. Women have a wider hip than men and that's why you see the hourglass shape for women's body type. To put emphasis on the hip is what makes a woman, well, woman (aside from the boobs). This is one of the make it or break it thin imo. If you don't really have the hips even when you have the boobs to back it up, it just looks kind of awkward.

  3. Back to the right shoulder. Again, the anatomy is okay if you just kept it like that. However, if you do that sort of pose when you're holding onto a branch, unless you add a cell phone in between (which I'd understand why your shoulder would be like that), it just looks like a lot of un-needed tension for the neck and shoulder. The neck muscles will be really strained due to how close the shoulder is to it. To make it more natural, I moved the shoulder down a little to give it less tension between the muscles.

  4. This is one of the part that I actually had to redline and move around several times. That is because the body's not viewed from side ways, but from a 3/4 angle. Why is that hard? Because if you're viewing it from the side, it's easier to be like, k one leg forward one leg back. Real easy to see. However, when it's facing towards the right, but not completely it gets a little hard regarding the perspectives. What I did was temporarily forget that the left leg's posing like that and made it so that she's kinda holding on to the branch tip toeing with both of her legs at 3/4 view. Your original leg placement for the right leg would have been fine if her hands were holding the branch from the back of her head. But because the arms are not, we don't need such a dramatic line of the rest of the body bending forward (I'm talking about near the pelvic bones). Therefore, I moved it back slightly to make the pose a lil' more natural.

  5. This is a minor thing, but do keep track of where you're facing. The right leg's foot looked like it was facing directly to the front, but the rest of your body's facing towards the right. So do make sure the direction that you're facing matches up with all body parts.

In all, I think your anatomy's pretty solid but could use a little more study regarding the flexibility for human muscles. c: Hope this long wall of text helps somewhat!

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Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
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Thank you so much! That was really informative. However, I was about to edit to say I had finished. :X I'll keep that all in mind for next time though, I wish I had waited a little longer to finish this!!

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Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
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That's totally fine! I usually find errors too late but always keep them in mind for the next time I draw! But glad you found it informative! ❤️

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Jul 3, 2009 16 years ago
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I just wanted to say the finished image came out really nice, you really captured the whim of 's character. ❤️

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