Critiques and redlines are appreciated <3

It's the first person thing I've drawn in two years. But that's no excuse, so go ahead =) braces for critiques

http://www.subeta.net/gallery.php/view:3701/?full=true

Ok, so its not hugely detailed, is it the finished product? ive said before, that personally i like this kind of art, and its very good for something drawn with a mouse. Is it in paint?

I used to enjoy doing those kind of pictures in paint with my computer, but since i got the laptop its so much harder with a mousepad.

I think if you coloured and neatened up some of the lines, it could look really cute ^^;

no, it's just a sketch. (: And I only have paint because I can't oekaki and I'm lazy to buy an art program. And thanks!

I hate the way I draw eyes. :p But thank you! And yes, the torso is wide. x3 Next time, I'll fix the shoulders so hopefully it won't look as wide. Thank you for the critique~

Aww, I don't think her shoulders are unrealistically wide. :P Not every one is a waif. I do think her torso is a tiny bit short, you seem to have shrunk the bellybutton/crotch area.

If you don't have money for an art program, may I suggest downloading GIMP? It's free, and it's what I use, since I broke my photoshop-thingy. xD

Anyhow, I would work on your anatomy; I disagree, the shoulders aren't too wide, the head is. And the body seems sort of stout. Plus the pose is very... Well, stagnant. You shouldn't hide arms behind the back like that, just to avoid drawing hands. Cx

Oh yes, very short :/ I just looked again.

gimp almost crashed my computer unfortunately. ): I'm going to get photoshop soon, hopefully, so that'll be fixed. ^^ Gah but I hate drawing hands :x I'll probably fix those too, especially cause with the kite it looks strange.

I think the shoulders look wide because of the short torso... I'll go and fix it up later. ^^ Thanks to both of you!

Ah, did it really? D: I'm sorry. I hope you can get photoshop soon, then. C: I understand your hatred for drawing hands, though.

But yeah; I think if you fixed those things a little it would look real good! n-n