got my pet Zephyros done. anyone wanna tell me what they think about his story? oh and any suggestions to make him better?

It's a good story, but I would seriously take a look over it and correct the many punctuation issues I saw, along with quite a few run-on sentences. It makes reading tedious.

i agree with rashumi. there are some typographical errors as well :3 But he has a good story. Maybe add more to his TC? you can others for help with this, as i'm not too good with TCs xD

ok thanks every one

The text color is also hard to read btw xD Nice job so far though ^-^