If you want to send it I can read it as soon as I get a chance :) At work for a little longer today, then errands, then massive cleaning rush once I get home for company coming over tomorrow - but I can definitely hang onto it and read when I take a break to catch my breath! :)

The first few pages...

Feedback is always awesome!

I'm really terrible at feedback, so I sent it to you in comment form instead of here... :)

Here's a new story...

If you have the time, of course! <3

I scanned over the second story and a few errors jumped out at me.

1. You mention daughter twice but if the story is about Samuel, it should be son. Unless the boy is in fact a girl, but you would need to explain that somewhere. Otherwise it just seems you used the wrong descriptor.
2. A "lifeless living body" is too much of a contradiction. If something is lifeless then it cannot be living. I understand the point is to convey the fact Samuel feels empty, but there are other possibilities (like listless, vacant, hollow) that don't have a contradictory definition. I suggest looking at Thesaurus.com when looking for adjectives. I use that site a lot, probably too much. LOL
3. You use the word "to" in the line "a scar was typical and to big deal"... I am assuming you meant "no" instead.
4. When the father speaks, you need to make it clear who is speaking by replacing the next applicable "he" with Samuel. And the line ' "S-Sammy,” he cried, “My little b-boy…” ' needs to be its own paragraph, since it's a different speaker than the paragraph's surrounding it. Those paragraphs where you include the father's thoughts seem to include Samuel's thoughts as well... You should only per paragraph and it's important to make sure to its clear who is "speaking" in each paragraph.

I hope that you find my comments helpful. You have some interesting, almost poetic moments in "Remnants of Marble" and an interesting concept overall. -nods-

So you like?

Thanks!

Like? On an emotional level, no... It's not really my kind of subject matter. Well, not independently presented at least. I've got characters who have been abused and some who are abusive, but my stories are pretty optimistic in general.

However, on a technical level, the answer is yes. I think you've got a talent for writing and I feel you should keep honing your skills, if writing is something you enjoy. (I try to learn something new every time I sit down to write. -nods-)

Thanks!

If you'd like to see more, I could post some. :3

To be honest, I am sporadic (at best) with my helpfulness. If your stories are on your pet pages, I can look through them later and see if anything jumps out at me. I can't guarantee I'll be prompt. I tend to get distracted by real life and my own writing.

Also, there is no need to link to them if you don't want to... I know how to track down the links. -rubs hands together like an evil genuis- "Mwhahaha!" XD

Alright! :3

I feel dreadful... I've not done any writing like I've wanted to.. my motivation kinda jumped out the window flipping me off. Not even music has been helping and I have found a lot of songs that gets me thinking. Does anyone know of any writing exercises that are fun and have helped motivate and inspire?

Super duper busy for a while but I'll look when I can :)

All the advice I've read is "write anyway" and to not wait to feel inspired... not that that really helps. Sorry :/

Hmm I suppose it wouldn't hurt to try. Thank you. ^^

Thanks!

I don't know if you would consider my current go-to method much fun but... I research random but vaguely applicable stuff. Whether it's character traits or writing tips, I'll pick something I think relates to something I want to incorporate and I just look through articles, etc. until something clicks. Once I lock in on something interesting, it motivates me to keep writing until I've exhausted my interest. -nods- Right now, for me, it's voices. I don't know what I stumbled across on YouTube yesterday but something got me started thinking about exactly how my character Faryl should sound and I've spent the past 24 hours figuring out how to describe the voice I picked out. (Well, actually, I've been trying to figure out how to describe it without going overboard on descriptors. It would have been much easier to described it if I'd let myself focus on every single little detail. LOL) Because I kept at it, I now know that Faryl's voice plays a key role in the first act. Yep yep.

Anyway, if anyone is interested, I found this blog url=http://writeworld.org/post/34979795015/describing-voices[/url] which has handy links to various articles about describing voices, some of which were helpful to me... Others... not so much.

Oh that seems very helpful, thanks for the tips and the link!!!

I hope that you find something that helps, even if it has nothing to do with my suggestions. XD Glad to see you over here in this topic, by the way. I don't even try to keep up with the Battle Chat anymore... Though it's good that it's so active. -nods-

Haegan's decided to be humorous today and is telling me about King James the Fool... ahem... the Fifth. I am so glad he and I are on speaking terms again. LOL

Ahaha... I'm glad you guys are speaking, too! Sounds like a good day :)

I've had company over all weekend... I haven't really been able to give my kids much attention.

Anybody interested in historical fiction...?

I've written a story and I'm dying to have an opinion on it... @

Haven't really worked much on my original works, but did finally sit down this weekend and plot out the first part of the outline of the massive fanfic series my girlfriend and I have been poking at for the better part of a year, plus figured out the overarching story thread that ties it all together.

Pretty pleased, actually!