Lazy Pet People - The Chat
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I actually have enough now that I can stop buying them, I think.
I can't stop. I can never stop. Sigh. My work computer keeps crashing. So I can only buy them when I'm at home.
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2,343 / 2,500 scratched, and 2821 various ones stashed to scratched. Woo!
You're going to keep going past 5k? Or, I can buy for you and you can have a hundred trades.
I have no idea how many I have. Or what I'm at. I should probably check.
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Might be a good idea, you might have enough already?
I might, actually. I suppose I could stop for a while, and then when I get through them all I could buy more if I needed them.
I'm so lazy though. They are going to rot in my vault forever. Fiveever. maybe even sixever.
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Vaults are the worst place for them, since you can't take quantity out... its all or nothing, and with 600 its a bit crazy to take them out, so I do 20-30 at a time... and its not so bad.
you can just click like mad on the x until you get bored. Thats what I do.
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Yea, I just click on 7 of the dots in a pattern, load the next, carry on.
Yup. Basically that.
Also you will proud of me. Got all the alegarten achievements. Even wearables. So I did all the food. Well excep tthe beer. Waiting on those to show up in the shop.
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I am proud of you! That's a lot of stuff bought and done with. Now, they'll add more achievements.
God I fucking hope not. I'm so annoyed that I had to wait the five minutes to buy everything. Sigh.
ERRBODY'S PRECIOUS.
[edit] Last chance to enter my Contest! Offer on my MKB trade with a number between 1 and 50. I will be picking a number in the next hour... or when I wake up if I fall asleep first.
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CONGRATULATIONS for the winning number of 13! Hope you guys enjoyed the raffle, maybe I can do another one in the week ❤
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But, in general... The overflow on the text boxes shouldn't be set to hover. The text jumping so the scroll bar has to pop up makes reading it harder and is a good way for someone to lose their place in your story and give up if they move their mouse away. Also, the light grey text on the white background doesn't work. It strains the eyes and makes reading it harder. Your sentences are rather choppy, what with all of the full stops, try to consolidate them into something longer and cohesive.
Now, as for Chewwie; It's great to use descriptive words in stories, it really is, but... the story reads too much like a children's story. I know, it's a story about a fandom obsessed-ferret and seems like a childish story, but... it feels more, like you're trying a bit too hard to make the story interesting. Also, about the list of fandoms... let's trim that down into something more flowing instead of just listing off all of the ones you know. Try something like... "Together they embarked on innumerable adventures that took them to many different worlds and times, and on these journeys they encountered time-travelers, elves, clever detectives, and countless other brave heroes." You don't need to be specific because it's basically like just listing all of the fandoms by name on your profile. And lastly, all creatures sniff and smell. If you really want to make a point about how different Chewwie is from normal ferrets, try another descriptor.
Photographie; Honestly? I believe this story could use some general re-writing. There are no specific criticisms to give except that the flow seems a little forced, and there are a lot of cliches, like your character referring to thunderstorms as "friends" three times over the course of the story. There are other, slightly less cliche ways to convey her affection for the weather and the feeling of intimacy she gets from being alone in a thunderstorm. The descriptions are a little much, and they border on the cliche side of purple prose, especially the ibex's "defiant" horns and the repeated descriptions of how impressive the storms are. Things like that are best gotten across with as few flowery words as possible, and not re-stated over the course of the story. Another small thing, footfalls and footsteps are different. Footfalls refers, specifically, to the sound made by footsteps, so 'footsteps' would be the term you're looking for here.
Alex; This one is actually the best written of the three, however, tone back on your cliches and forced descriptions and you should be golden.[/font]
quitting - non-cw version. sp and csc accepted. - it&;s finally happening: the ufa-ening.
Yeah, which means I got the beer stuff I needed. Now I just need Delectable to get hungry.
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Going to get any extra things when the next store opens?
At least you're remembering to feed your pets without me pestering you. yay!
only because of achievements! and I might grab a few extras. Idk. Do I really need more sit to sit around in my shop? Probably.
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Its not like you're in a rush to sell things, so if/when they sell, awesome, as long as they dont go below what you paid
I doubt that will happen. We'll see how motviated I feel later when I properly wake up. I'm so sick now :( Took the day off work because I was up until 4am with this terrible cough and now I can't breathe again. Its really pissing me off.
But on the brightside, because I was up, I managed to get to 2500 scratch cards. So thats something.
Now just the push to the last 2500 and I'm set.
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