Not a problem :) Lemme switch comps quick and I'll get a red line tossed together!

[edit] Alright, so here's what I came up with: click!

So what did I do. Basically the things that I saw were the one pigtail overlapping a little too much, so I added some space under it where you see the hair coming up into the pigtail and pushed the actual pigtail over a little. The part wasn't quite centered, so that was a quick little fix. One think you want to remember about your strands that, if you are doing an even hairstyle (something that is 'the same' on both sides of the HA) you want to make sure the HA's right side of the hair is just slightly above the left since the HA stands at a 3/4 view instead of straight on. I think those are the major things that staff is seeing with the ringlet coming down by the HA's face and potentially with the bottom of the hair.

I hope this helps, but if anything is hard to see or understand just let me know and I'll happily try to explain a little better!

okay that helped alot, by alot , I mean ALOT!! THANKS!! I see what your saying now, so i made the strands different but basically the same angle. Im glad it got denied because seeing what you redlined, i saw my strands could also be less chunky,

so do what do you think ? mind you have not completed shading and lineart but i fixed what was mentioned, but just wanted to make sure what ya thought. thanks for the help

- Of course :) It looks a lot better so far. The only thing I would say is to push the pigtail back a little bit more. It's still kind of overlapping the top of the head a little too much. But the strand by the face looks much, much better. Looking great!

is that the overlapping you were mentioning ?

- Yes. Compare that part of the pigtail to the other side. The other side doesn't droop as quickly as the side you have circles. Also use the bangs as measurement. The part you have circled touches the bangs right now, while on the other side there is a clear separation between the pigtail and the bangs. That'll help you figure out how much space to stick in there.

Also, the part looks much better as well :)

if i was slotting for these colors, who would be interested? and if not interested,what best color combination. the hair color is set in stone though but some of the flowers for them , could be better.

if you dont like the style,that it is fine. just mainly need interest check/maybe color suggestions if that. I have a pinkish red as a private,so that color combo is out. Thank you!

Once I have an idea on what will be popular, i will improve on the lineart and some areas that i see I missed.

I would totally be interested in the brown one u Possible black too :D

definitely love the brown :D

I really like the green/blue c:

I like the black color :)

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